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In order to defeat a plot to suppress technology that will save millions of lives, a surveillance expert must play a deadly game of cat-and-mouse with an evil multinational and the shadowy private intelligence agency that employs him.
When a pharmaceutical conglomerate suppress the drug that could save his daughter, a geeky surveillance expert must retrieve the information from their remote secure digital data vault.
When a pharmaceutical conglomerate suppress the drug that could save his daughter, a geeky surveillance expert must retrieve the information from their remote secure digital data vault.
See lessJesus Christ living under an alias is brutalized by two police officers and decides to fight back bringing him face to face with his estranged daughter a sergeant in SWAT. Their confrontation will decide whether humanity lives or dies.
The Belgium movie?The Brand New Testament (original French title Le tout nouveau testament)?is based on an equally provocative premise. It is a very good satirical comedy that despite its thought provoking and some may blasphematory is a heart warming movie with some fantastic acting. in this movie,Read more
The Belgium movie?The Brand New Testament (original French title Le tout nouveau testament)?is based on an equally provocative premise. It is a very good satirical comedy that despite its thought provoking and some may blasphematory is a heart warming movie with some fantastic acting.
in this movie, the protagonist is his God’s daughter and her goal is to save humanity.
Making that same change will make your logline more logical. Also by having a vulnerable protagonist, you introduce some kind of suspense making it more attractive. Otherwise it sounds like the all powerful being Jesus Christ is not happy and is going to kicks me butts. Who us going to stop him? Nobody can. End of.
Strange premise can make very good science-fiction movie, but the premise must be written in a coherent fashion and not turn into a gimmick. Jesus Christ is a badass run the risk of turning into gimmickry and ridicule.
A good example of science-fiction movie based on a weird premise is the?French movie?A mere mortal (original French title Simple mortel). When a linguist specialised in dead language starts receiving coded messages he must fulfil increasingly difficult missions to save humanity. In the movie the entire humanity is at risk but with an unlikely protagonist. It has no special effect and starts as a mundane slice of French life before veering toward the weird thriller.
See lessrevised:Revised: Christ Jesus living under an alias is brutalized by two police officers this time he decides to fight back bringing him into a face to face confrontation with his estranged daughter a police sergeant whose outcome will decide whether humanity lives or dies.
First As mentioned by Nir before, you should post your edited logline in the original thread or edit the original post. Now on the logline itself, it is very confusing. On the top of this web page, there is a tab/button Our Formula. If you click on it, you will find a short description of how to wriRead more
First As mentioned by Nir before, you should post your edited logline in the original thread or edit the original post.
See lessNow on the logline itself, it is very confusing. On the top of this web page, there is a tab/button Our Formula. If you click on it, you will find a short description of how to write a sensible logline.
Your logline does not have a inciting incident (I can’t see a connection between fighting against two thuggish police officers and the fate of humanity), a protagonist (is it Jesus Christ or his daughter), an antagonist, a goal (does he still want to sacrifice himself, save humanity, sacrifice his daughter, …).
Also usually the logline indicates the genre (satire, comedy, western, science-fiction, thriller, drama, action, …), but ?your logline does not give any indication. What is it a satirical comedy or a drama?