Hey DaddyBear,

I like the premise of of this story; especially since alcoholism affects the families (as per AA Big Book & RA Multilith Big Book).

I would like to know something more about the uncles that gives me a sense of their personalities, persona, or position in the family as a couple. Or perhaps we don’t know that they are a gay couple until later in the story (A REVEAL!).

Maybe they don’t socialize with the family much, however decide to bite the bullet and do so for their 50th Anniversary (I was working on a previous version of the logline that included 50th Anniversary and their names, and for some weird reason the page refreshed on me, and I can’t find it!).

Also would suggest doing the same for either the family and/or the nephew to give us some sense of his issue, or what he’s up to AND against in this life.

For example: “On the eve of his RECLUSIVE Uncles’ anniversary dinner,??a NEUROTIC Marcus, continues to alienate family members as he spirals deeper into his alcoholism by manipulating and attacking each one.

What can I say? I grew up watching many engrossing, psychological, dark, Ingmar Bergman films.

Of course you know the story, so add what’s representative of the characters and starting points for the arcs.

I haven’t read any of the other replies so I hope I’m not being redundant. Just signed up here and jumped in right away!

Valerie Michele