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  1. Posted: August 5, 2020In: Drama

    When her brother suddenly dies, an anxiety prone sister is forced to hatch an elaborate scheme to conceal the tragedy from her suspicious mother who stops at nothing to unravel the truth.

    vivien Penpusher
    Replied to answer on August 6, 2020 at 7:55 pm

    Thank you for your comments. You revised logline is positive and shows the true essence of the story. Thank you. I really like your analogy of the mother's journey to the seeking for an answer to the mystery of the earth. As to my film concept, had you watched 'Since Otar left' you'd see that my stoRead more

    Thank you for your comments. You revised logline is positive and shows the true essence of the story. Thank you. I really like your analogy of the mother’s journey to the seeking for an answer to the mystery of the earth.

    As to my film concept, had you watched ‘Since Otar left’ you’d see that my story is much closer to this story than Farewell. Farewell has a cultural component about family hiding a painful truth from their loved ones, especially the elderly. My family is from a Vietnamese background and some incidents’/events in the script actually happened within my family and among my relatives.

    Originally, I wanted to tell the story from a cultural perspective, but you are the second person who alerted me of the fact that shoud it get onto the big screen it would be certainly compared to Farewell, which is a high bar to reach, especially in term of production value.

    My story is very different from Farewell, and I do not wish it to be considered as an adaptation of another’s. So, I am seriously considering making this story a non-Vietnamese story. I’ll emphasise on the universal complex family relationship and the extend to which family members go to shield one another from painful reality, which might end up hurting them one way or another.

    We’ll see how things go. Thanks again for your thoughtful comments.

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  2. Posted: August 5, 2020In: Drama

    When her brother suddenly dies, an anxiety prone sister is forced to hatch an elaborate scheme to conceal the tragedy from her suspicious mother who stops at nothing to unravel the truth.

    vivien Penpusher
    Replied to answer on August 6, 2020 at 12:49 pm

    Thank you for your comments. The protagonist is the sister and the mother also plays the main supporting role. The story is about a close family who is very protective of the mother. All characters in the story are adults and the mother is elderly and emotionally fragile. Her son is her pride and heRead more

    Thank you for your comments. The protagonist is the sister and the mother also plays the main supporting role.

    The story is about a close family who is very protective of the mother. All characters in the story are adults and the mother is elderly and emotionally fragile. Her son is her pride and her life, sort to speak.

    When the son dies from a car accident while the mother is overseas, the family decides not to tell her – hence the elaborate scheme to keep her in the dark –  because they fear she’d not survive the horrific news. But the mother begins to question the stories and bogus evidence the daughter shows her to make believe the son is still alive. She suspects that something might have happened to him and starts her own investigation.

    This story is reminiscent of  the French/Georgian film ‘Since Otar left’ or the American film ‘The Farewell’ where the family hides  painful truth from their elders. This practice is prevalent in the Asian culture but rarely in the Western culture.

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  3. Posted: August 5, 2020In: Romance

    Claudia Amanda, a compliant daughter of a tycoon, has to entangle in an agreement to save his dad and the people behind the success of their company.

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    Added an answer on August 5, 2020 at 7:38 pm

    The story is not clear to me. Why does Claudia need to save her dad and the people in their company? What trouble does the father encounter? What agreement does Claudia get into and with whom does she make the agreement with. What do you mean by compliant daughter? Would she rather not get into theRead more

    The story is not clear to me. Why does Claudia need to save her dad and the people in their company? What trouble does the father encounter? What agreement does Claudia get into and with whom does she make the agreement with. What do you mean by compliant daughter? Would she rather not get into the agreement but have to because she is afraid of her father?

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