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The worlds two worst explorers embark on a perilous quest to a mysterious tibetan mountain in hopes of finding the legendary Yeti before their botanist rivals do.
Hi Sam! FYI...I'm not a logline expert...but I'll do my best to analyze your logline. I love the fact that these are 'the world's worst explorers'. I immediately see an adventure/comedy. But I guess this needs a pay-off at the end of the logline. Loglines are not supposed to have many story details,Read more
Hi Sam!
FYI…I’m not a logline expert…but I’ll do my best to analyze your logline.
I love the fact that these are ‘the world’s worst explorers’. I immediately see an adventure/comedy. But I guess this needs a pay-off at the end of the logline.
Loglines are not supposed to have many story details, but I think we need to know what’s at stake when their botanist rivals find the legendary Yeti first and what are the ramifications of being such a bad explorer. And why do they need to find that Yeti so badly? What’s at stake for them if they don’t find the Yeti? And more importantly: what if their rivals find it first? And all this without going into story detail and still have a clear concise concept! That’s hard, I know. I am struggling with my logline as well.
Underneath a totally ridiculous logline, but I think that these components should be in it.
Protagonis – goal – antagonist + a sense of genre
When two of the world’s worst explorers embark on a perilous quest to a mysterious Tibetan mountain to find the Yeti, the only creature that can save the people of Xavix, they must outsmart two evil extremely hot botanists, who want to take academic credit and these girs will do anything to achieve it. And I mean anything.
I chose to try and give a sense of the comedy genre. I don’t know your story, but that’s what I got from the two worst explorers.
I hope this was helpful. This could become a very funny movie!
Best,
Wilke
See lessU.S. President Nicholas Romans faces revolution spinning from violent protests in the country, while his wife Alexandra places faith into a supposed holy man to heal their dying son.
Hi Zelozelos! Let me state first: I'm not a logline expert!:-) But I'll try to pass on the things I do know about loglines. From what I understand about ' logline rules ' you never use the character names. In this case, the president of the US is sufficient. Even better if you add an adjective thatRead more
Hi Zelozelos!
Let me state first: I’m not a logline expert!:-) But I’ll try to pass on the things I do know about loglines.
From what I understand about ‘ logline rules ‘ you never use the character names. In this case, the president of the US is sufficient. Even better if you add an adjective that arouses interest in the character. For instance; the Incapable president of the US must….
Also, it’s good to define your core concept when you start crafting your logline. Is this about a man whose marriage is about to end because he can’s deal with the loss of his son? Or because he puts the country first? What I get from the synopsis now are 2 different stories. Try to connect the 2! The mother who’s into a weird guru and the dying son immediately draws my attention. You’ve got something there. Find the conflict between the president and his wife and you’ll have an interesting story!
I hope this was helpful. Good luck with your writing.
Warm Regards
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