1. Posted: November 18, 2012In:

    Revision: An unhappy couple enters the Wife Carrying Contest, per the request of a young rookie psychologist, in hopes that it will revitalize their marriage.

    WillieBarnesjr

    Thank you guys for all of your comments and everyone is exactly right. I changed it once more to add the comedy aspect and to show the antagonist of the story. With the new logline, I'm hoping it will explain more of why I named the title, Wife Carrying. Logline "With Phillip feeling like Barbra hasRead more

    Thank you guys for all of your comments and everyone is exactly right. I changed it once more to add the comedy aspect and to show the antagonist of the story. With the new logline, I’m hoping it will explain more of why I named the title, Wife Carrying.

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    “With Phillip feeling like Barbra has let herself go, he gets another heavy load on his back, literally, when he finds out that she has entered them into the Wife Carrying Contest in hopes that it will revitalize their marriage. ”

    You guy’s comments have been very helpful and I would love more feedback.

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  2. Posted: November 16, 2012In:

    In the small harbor town of Boothbay, Maine, older married couple Phillip and Barbra who are both unhappy in their marriage, the young newlywed couple Doug and Sarah who just moved in next door, and longtime neighbor John that?s still hung up on his deceased wife, enter the Wife Carrying Contest after Sarah, a rookie psychologist, tells Barbra it will strengthen her marriage!

    WillieBarnesjr

    Everything you guys said is right. I'm going to shorten it up and what Richiev said is exactly what it is. Thank you guys once again.

    Everything you guys said is right. I’m going to shorten it up and what Richiev said is exactly what it is. Thank you guys once again.

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  3. Posted: November 14, 2012In:

    As the ghost of a young man lingers in his apartment, he gradually transforms into a vengeful, evil spirit as he gets more and more jealous of his roommates' lives and becomes convinced that they are starting to forget him

    WillieBarnesjr

    I think this is very interesting and will have a huge change from playful to scary.

    I think this is very interesting and will have a huge change from playful to scary.

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