1. Posted: April 3, 2017In:

    When her male colleagues wager on her best friend’s chastity, a woman remains silent; when the bet ends in rape, she seeks redemption through vengeance.

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    yqwertz Mentor

    Thanks for your comments. I understand your position. Until now, I understood that the hook in the logline got you just to the end of the first act. (At that point my heroine has decided what she must do, but she does not figure out the how until the end of the second act.) What you all seem to be sRead more

    Thanks for your comments. I understand your position. Until now, I understood that the hook in the logline got you just to the end of the first act. (At that point my heroine has decided what she must do, but she does not figure out the how until the end of the second act.)

    What you all seem to be saying is that the logline take us as far into the film as necessary until we come to a unique hook. Is that a fair summary?

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  2. Posted: April 4, 2017In:

    Twenty something Sherlock Holmes and Jame Moriarty hatch a plan to start a war and profit, only to be undone by a secret government agency headed by Mycroft Holmes.

    yqwertz Mentor

    This looks like the end of the story: ..only to be undone by a secret government agency headed by Mycroft Holmes.Does the end belong in the logline?What is the inciting incident in your story? In the books Sherlock Holmes is not driven by money, a complaint Dr. Watson makes often, so starting a warRead more

    This looks like the end of the story:

    ..only to be undone by a secret government agency headed by Mycroft Holmes.

    Does the end belong in the logline?

    What is the inciting incident in your story? In the books Sherlock Holmes is not driven by money, a complaint Dr. Watson makes often, so starting a war in the hope making profits off it would seem out of character.

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