An emotionally stunted musician hits the road with an aspiring producer in order to track down the woman who has been the subject of all his work since she broke his heart in high school.

Hey guys - all extremely helpful and positive feedback. It's gotten me very excited about this project. Will submit a revised logline today, to see how we go.

Geno Scala (sharkeatingman)- judge

I think it's a great, simple concept and almost a great logline. The back-end is a bit wordy:

"...to track down the inspiration of his songs: his former high school sweatheart."

Immediately, songs like "Taxi" and "Lucy in The Sky with Diamonds" comes to mind, as both songs were the result of this very premise. I think the title is bad, though, and would strongly encourage you to consider something like "Lucy in The Sky", or a title of one of his original songs.

I'd pay to see this story! Good job.