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Posted: August 2, 20192019-08-02T14:13:04+10:00 2019-08-02T14:13:04+10:00In: SciFi

A stressed out business exec takes up meditation for relief, only to have visions of his employees miserable lives should his failing business go under

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    1. Mike Pedley Singularity
      2019-08-02T19:02:40+10:00Added an answer on August 2, 2019 at 7:02 pm

      This seems like just the inciting incident to me, what is he going to do about it? What’s his goal?

      When his stress-relieving meditation gives him premonitions of his employees’ miserable lives should his business fail, a XXXXX XXXXX must…

      He’s doing something to combat stress = he’s stressed
      They’re his employees and it’s his business = business exec

      This leaves plenty of scope to describe the main character in a new way so we get even more information about who he is.

      Hope this helps.

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