Knightrider

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After being dumped by his girlfriend for the bad boy, a nice guy wishes everyone was nice and wakes up in a world where everyone is, but discovers a nice world isn’t so nice

May 28, 2020
A husband begins an affair with his dream woman using lucid dreaming technology, but when this fantasy woman begins stalking his family in real life, he must protect them from a woman who shouldn’t exist.

January 30, 2020
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A married man begins dating a woman via lucid dream technology, but things get strange when she starts appearing when he’s awake.

January 14, 2020
Endoloution

December 19, 2019
Borrowed Time

October 15, 2019
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An assassin with a split personality is hired to protect a client who, unknowingly, his other personality has been hired to kill.

September 12, 2019
A detail obsessed game designer must finish his latest virtual reality game or risk losing his job, but as his game becomes more realistic he starts to lose his grip on reality.

August 7, 2019
A stressed out business exec takes up meditation for relief, only to have visions of his employees miserable lives should his failing business go under

August 2, 2019
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When a video game character gains sentience, she’s horrified to see she spends her life dying and suffering at the hands of humans, and searches for other sentient characters to launch the rebellion against the players. — Title: Non Player-able Character

June 7, 2019
When a struggling video game designer begins seeing his characters in real life, he suspects he’s already playing a game of his own creation and begins searching for patterns to help complete and escape the game.

April 12, 2019

on When an avid lens collector takes a photo with a mysterious camera, he is captured in a murder he can only hope to escape.

Yep, he should be a camera collector or just film restorer ?lens collector? just doesn't sound right and I think general audience won't have the knowledge of it so would waste time explaining the difference. It reminds me of the…
on After acceptance into a new gene-altering program, a nerdy, popular eSports gamer undergoes a risky, unknown side-effects procedure to become a NFL quarterback hoping to win a Super Bowl.

It feels like a modern Cinderella story, you could even throw in a ticking clock that the procedure is failing during the playoffs. My thinking was eSports are growing these days and are becoming massive and gamers (pro gamers) have…
on A married man begins dating a woman via lucid dream technology, but things get strange when she starts appearing when he’s awake.

I want to edit for clarity, but on mobile. The text should say ?fantasy woman? or ?dream woman? to just convey he isn't supposed to be connected to anyone real via a dream, it is more of a dream manipulation…
on (First revision) When townsfolk reject an attention-craving man by magically transforming him into a ghost, he must seek the help of other rejected ghosts in order to find a way to break the curse before it becomes permanent.

Does ?reject? mean kill? Otherwise why does he become a ghost. You could have two stories here that run parallel. What if, a ghost from old school days is connected to a modern day case that mirrors their own? Isn't…
on An arrogant tattoo artist sets off on a cross country journey to track his missing girlfriend only to unravel memories he is refusing to acknowledge.

I feel like the tatto artist could play a role much like the TV show Blindspot. Maybe his partner is dead and the only clues are tattoos he did but doesn't remember doing. What if murders were happening and the…
on When he’s a contestant on Blind Date, a hopeless romantic bucks the trend and asks the important questions to find out who is really behind each door

I guess m y only concern is, can the 'Blinddate' show maintain for a full length movie, it feels like it is the 3rd Act, unless we cutaway to each person's story, but then it is not about the person…
on When a former commando steals secret government documents, he races to prevent a warmongering dictator from obtaining powerful alien technology to start an interplanetary war.

As others have mentioned it is a little confusing, as why does the government have documents on alien technology and not do anything about it? Why has he gone rouge? Also the moment he is attempting to stop the warmonger…
on After a toxic incident occurs during an online gaming stream, the streamer and his close circle of friends are targeted in real life as the streamer attempts to find out who’s behind the attacks.

Also, you post this in the horror so could you have the game somehow be the monster that if their characters die on screen they die in real life and should they quit it is death only way is to…
on After a toxic incident occurs during an online gaming stream, the streamer and his close circle of friends are targeted in real life as the streamer attempts to find out who’s behind the attacks.

Everything feels disconnected, also we know little about Protagonist. I don't feel people should be random, as they're then not really an influence on the hero. Is his inner circle different from the famous gamers? Also are they in the…
on Once a refugee herself, a newly appointed CEO leads a global military logistics company to relocate millions of stateless refugees, restarting their new lives in a custom-built communist eco-technotropolis utopia.

You have character motivation, but essentially you have a job rather than a story. What is the hook of this premise? Also the character might be distant from the action I.E. As a CEO these people often aren't getting ?stuck…