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Posted: November 19, 20192019-11-19T01:51:19+10:00 2019-11-19T01:51:19+10:00In: Family

When the family restaurant is going under, a klutzy teenager accidentally creates a secret menu based on her cooking mishaps, and must keep up with the charade to help save the restaurant.

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    1. Mike Pedley Singularity
      2019-11-19T02:00:48+10:00Added an answer on November 19, 2019 at 2:00 am

      I think there’s something in this idea. Kinda Ratatouille-esque.

      Couple of pointers:

      The protagonist shouldn’t do anything accidentally in order to achieve the goal. A PROtagonist should be PROactive.

      How do you create a secret menu anyway? Do the customers get this menu privately and then she cooks them the food without her family knowing? Is this the charade that she’s trying to keep up?

      I would remove “accidentally”, explain specifically what she is doing regarding the menu and the food – simpler the better, tell us why what she’s doing is going to help (she creates unusual combos the crowds go wild for?) and somehow explain why she has to do all of this without her family knowing. It sounds a lot but I think once you unpack the story I think it’ll fall into place.

      Try the generator too… it might be a useful tool.

      Hope this helps.

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    2. dpg Singularity
      2019-11-19T06:16:29+10:00Added an answer on November 19, 2019 at 6:16 am

      As mikepedley85 said.

      I can buy into the scenario where she accidentally creates a great recipe. Once.? Maybe twice.? Because that can happen in the career of a great chef.? Heck, it happened to me and I can barely boil water.

      But over and over and over??? Well, yes I can buy into it as a comedy, a genre, in which there is dramatic license to take liberties with plausibility and probability.? But the story is tagged as a Family flick so I’m not sure if that is your intention.

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    3. Neer Shelter Singularity
      2019-11-19T17:01:46+10:00Added an answer on November 19, 2019 at 5:01 pm

      Agreed with the others, perhaps she discovers one great dish that no one thought of – the next big culinary hit. However, when asked to expand on the recipe and put together a whole menu, she’s stumped and not sure how to do it.

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