A selfish drunkard is forced to run a startup and fight powerful government agencies after he inherits it from his righteous entrepreneur best friend who died mysteriously.

by hobbes · Initiate · 85 pts June 17, 2020 78 views

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dwon · Logliner · 155 pts June 18, 2020 ★ Accepted

When his tech genius best friend dies mysteriously, a Luddite wastrel must complete his invention while fighting off a brigade of spooks intent on capturing it.

Richiev · Oracle · 58,825 pts June 18, 2020

You should always think about writing the logline from the perspective of the lead character: for instance.

You write (Revision 1): A righteous entrepreneur dies mysteriously while battling autocratic leader...

From the lead character's point of view: When his best friend is murdered while battling an autocratic leader...

hobbes · Initiate · 85 pts June 18, 2020

Revision 1 (I am not sure if putting protagonist later is a good idea .. suggestions welcome)

A righteous entrepreneur dies mysteriously while batting autocratic leader politically; his self-centered drunkard best friend now has to run the startup he inherited and avenge his friend’s death.

A selfish drunkard is forced to run a startup and fight powerful government agencies after he inherits it from his righteous entrepreneur best friend who died mysteriously.

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