“A young woman is desperate to find out whether her step-father murdered her clinically depressed mother. But the only person who knows the truth is a killer himself…”

Dave: "It's a little unclear and there are 4 characters which makes it difficult to see where it's focus is. The young woman is the central character but 'desperate to find out' is not a goal that the character can achieve. There is an antagonist, the killer, but I don't see how it could be linked."

Jack: "We are not seeing the danger that obviously lurks in this film. The logline needs ramping up the reflect this. Is the young woman's life in danger as she investigates? If so, that should be in the logline."