After losing his military post and falling into a terrifying curse, an ex-soldier travels to the place where he will find his deliverance and the way to the lost city of Elyon, which will save the people of the world of Dunya.

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Pilgrims of Elyon: Call to Redemption

This film would be the first part of a trilogy that follows the protagonists’ journey to the lost city of Elyon, encountering obstacles and difficulties along the way, but also their identity and purpose.

A retelling based on the book The Pilgrim’s Progress (John Bunyan), with new characters, a broader, more realistic, and tangible story, but without leaving behind the essence and heart that made the book become the most read after the Bible in its day.

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Odie · Maestro · 6,290 pts

1. Since Elyon and Dunya are unfamiliar fantasy realms – a world setup may help e.g. In a world ruled by…
2. Appears the curse is your inciting incident; it may help to state what kind of curse this vet needs to break.
3. You need a baddie, someone/thing preventing him from achieving the goal.
4. Once he achieves deliverance, why HIM to save the world?

Example of what I can see:
“A cursed veteran sets out on a journey to a mystical lost city for deliverance, but…”

Keep going, take care.

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