Logliner
Posted: 2016-05-10T18:41:21+10:00 In:

When a plane crashes in the Alaska wilderness, two remaining survivors must find civilization before winter.

When a plane crashes in the Alaska wilderness, two remaining survivors must find civilization before winter.
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    1. Singularity

      The logline sets up a situation — and one with great dramatic potential — but it needs additional detail, and it needs to be framed in terms of a plot.

      Obviously, the need is to survive and be rescued. ? Well, what becomes the adult’s game plan to survive? ?And are there complicating factors? ?Like, for example, is winter approaching (a ticking clock)? ?That the adult is a photographer is an embellishment for the story but is irrelevant for the logline. ?More important need to know specifics for the deadline are whether the adult is male or female. And ‘ his/her age: ?young and fit or old and unfit. ?Does the adult have a medical condition that puts his own life in greater peril? ?And then, of course, there is matter of how to feed the infant who is too young to digest solids.

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    2. Uberwriter

      The pressing question for me is, do they wait for rescue or do they try and walk out?

      if they walk, why?

      “the only survivors of a plane crash in the Alaskian woods, a toddler and a thirty year old female photographer, must make the forty mile trek to safety”

      Not good, but it is a story. I hope this helps.

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    3. Singularity

      The premise sounds like it has great potential as a man v wild adventure, but as mentioned above the logline lacks detail.

      I would add that the structure is working against the logline, as DPG said, best if you check out the training section at the top bar.

      The search for survivors is irrelevant to the plot of the two people doing battle with nature, as they would presumably not be aware of the attempts and if they were it wouldn’t change what they do by much. Best to use the precious logline real-estate of the opening clause?to describe the crash and the main characters.

      Further more, ?an un expected obstacle on top of the obvious ?bad weather and starvation?would elevate this concept and its level of interest.

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