Logliner
Posted: 2016-05-19T14:09:08+10:00 In:

A loser father?s innocent lie, that he is a superhero, puts his kids in trouble who are held as hostages with terrorist; and now he must fight them without breaking his kid?s myth that he is a superhero.

A loser father?s innocent lie, that he is a superhero, puts his kids in trouble who are held as hostages with terrorist; and now he must fight them without breaking his kid?s myth that he is a superhero.
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    1. Singularity

      After his children are kidnapped, a father struggles to rescue them by living up to the lie he has told them, that he’s a superhero.

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    2. Singularity

      DPG nailed it.

      If this is a comedy there are not further productive notes, however if this is a drama then the father’s flaw needs elaborating on.

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    3. Singularity

      It seems to me to that it’s already implied that he’s loser that he resorts to lying to his children. ? One concern I have about the premise is the role of the mother. ?Does she and why would she play along with his deception?

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    4. Uberwriter

      Dpg’s version is great. I don’t think you should add the wife unless she plays a key role, such as motivating him somehow. I think that the situation highlights his flaw, that he lied to his children, he felt the need to turn himself into an actual superhero in their eyes.

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    5. Logliner

      Thanks for the feedback. Your insight has helped me figure out that there are two things which my log line is telling which I do not wish to ?intend:

      1. LOSER – Father is very hard working but is unsuccessful in his profession.

      2. SUPERHERO STORY – Superhero story is not for his ego boast but those stories were meant to educate (both academically and morally) his kids. But they took it too seriously.

      Thanks.

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