Therapy

Thanks Karl, that's helpful. Just to clarify, when you say 'pick something else', do you mean pick a different story? Or a different title? And if the main character was the patient, would that change anything? Because then she would be motivated, with a strong desire, etc?

When a naive psychiatrist is seduced by his female patient, she develops an obsession with him, stalking him and threatening to report him for sexual misconduct, risking his reputation, his career, his marriage? And his life.

Our main character is set up as a weak character: "naive". To counterbalance this, we need at least one powerful positive.

The logline is written entirely from the antagonist's POV. Turn it around so we see it from the MC's POV. That will in turn expose that we have not only a 'naive' main character, he's also passive...

(PS: Because you put the title in the space for the logline, it exposes its weakness. Pick something else.)

Hi,
Thanks so much for the feedback. To be honest I wasn't aware there were hundreds of stories like this. Obviously there's things like Fatal Attraction but ... good to know now if it's just a massive cliche. Thanks for the feedback on sentence structure too - I guess I saw it as one slip by him unleashing this uncontrollable force that wrecks his life. But again, I hear what you're saying about it not being original enough. Thanks again.