Shaming his family whilst alive is nothing compared to what they have to overcome now that Lee’s dead and unwed.

it needs to be clear, after i read it I had no idea what it was about or the strycture. I recommend going to the "write it" section at the top of the page.

maybe you should say something about why this being unwed is a problem. Is there a kid? What is the nature of the problems the family has to deal with, emotional, material, technical?

This just doesn't tell us enough about the story. I have no idea what it's about.

And Lee appears to be the protagonist, but he's dead?

Is this a supernatural thriller? It's just not clear enough.

Who's story is it? What do they want? and what does being unwed have to do with it?