Penpusher
Posted: 2017-05-27T09:01:35+10:00 In:

When inheriting his father’s car, Tom is exposed to all his secrets and while trying to re-establish with his ex-girlfriend, is forced to deal with the consequences of these revelations.

When inheriting his father’s car, Tom is exposed to all his secrets and while trying to re-establish with his ex-girlfriend, is forced to deal with the consequences of these revelations.
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    1. Singularity

      What is it the lead character must do when he discovers his father’s secrets?

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    2. Uberwriter

      Like Richiev asks, we need some more to go with en able to help you flesh this out further.

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    3. Singularity

      Agreed with the above, there is no need to name the character better to describe him instead.

      also getting his father’s car seems a little underwhelming as an inciting incident.
      Could you specify one significant secret the MC finds out that would drive him to take action?

      Lastly, the ex is more of a ‘B’ plot and can, therefore, be cut from the logline.

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    4. Samurai

      Based on the comments above and what I read into your plot, how about:

      After finding family secrets in his deceased father’s car, a bachelor must resolve their horrific outcomes to win back his girl.

      Not saying mine is good, just?suggesting it as an alternative to trigger lateral thinking.

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