Logliner
Posted: 2017-06-13T09:13:34+10:00 In:

Rewrite: When a muslim woman- betrothed as a child, follows her dream to choose her husband by herself, she must face terrorisation from her betrothed who feels dishonored.

Rewrite: When a muslim woman- betrothed as a child, follows her dream to choose her husband by herself, she must face terrorisation from her betrothed who feels dishonored.
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    2 Reviews

    1. Logliner

      Terrorization? Is that really a word? Also, the dash is misplaced, it should be a comma. I love this idea, though. Keep going with it!

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    2. Uberwriter

      Benneth,

      Sorry to say that I like the last version better.

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