Painted Worlds
I would like to note that I am collaborating with my brother, username God.Rains, on the same project; and we are very grateful to all who have given us feedback since he first posted our logline. We apologize for not replying to dpg's latest comment sooner than now, but we have to do all of our collaborating by phone. To respond to your latest comment, dpg, we do want our story to be character-driven; so your comment was very valuable and appreciated! After much discussion, here is our latest draft: "Transported with a group of his peers to an otherworldly gallery of paintings that become portals to strange worlds, an unpopular teen must overcome his insecurities and lead this band of misfits back home before the sinister evil that brought them here entraps them forever." Please continue to give us your honest and valuable feedback!
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VERY imaginative idea! Kudos! I’m no judge of log lines but the last part seems a bit vague. Maybe it’s just me but I’d like more specificity at the end and maybe just a TAD more in the rest of it. Hope this helps.
“Sinister Evil” >>> personify, objectify:
“The Painter”
I’m hooked. Title? Let me know when its published!
I’m hooked. Title? Let me know when its published!