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Matt Epstein
Posted: June 4, 20152015-06-04T05:44:51+10:00 2015-06-04T05:44:51+10:00In: Public

After discovering that his father is still alive a prodigious investment banker abandons his Wall Street job to find his dad, and does, at a monk monastery in Tibet where speaking is forbidden.

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    1. pressedham_d
      2015-06-04T11:01:00+10:00Added an answer on June 4, 2015 at 11:01 am

      Interesting, sounds like the sort of drama The Academy loves. You don’t need to specify that it’s a “monk” monastery – the fact that it is a place for monks is inherent in the word “monastery”.

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    2. Neer Shelter Singularity
      2015-06-04T11:23:13+10:00Added an answer on June 4, 2015 at 11:23 am

      This is another iteration of the same concept from an earlier post. This draft elaborates on the MC in a way that provides room for more conflict which is a good thing however the lack of clarity in the plot remains unchanged.

      It is still not clear whether this is a road story with the bulk of the action being taken on the way to the father or a drama with the bulk of the action taken after meeting the father.

      If it is a road movie; son travels to find father, then the logline needs to elaborate more on the obstacles the son will face on his journey to the father.
      If it is a drama movie; son wants answers from his long lost father vow of silence monk, then the logline positions the inciting incident too late and fails to elaborate on most of the plot.

      Hope this helps.

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