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Thank you for your reply! I also wondered about the word ?amenable?, it was between that and ?spineless?. Maybe ?spineless? works better? To give you some background on my script, the protagonist lives in a small town, is sheltered (by his over-bearing mother), submissive (to his narcissistic fiance) and intimidated (by his red-neck in-laws). What he really wants to do is travel and enjoy life before he settles down. Instead of voicing this desire, our protagonist leaves his bride-zilla at the alter and tries to skip town (thus incurring her family's wrath). In the end, he learns to stop running and stand up for himself (by having a Hot Fuzz style shoot out, naturally!) The final scene sees our hero wandering the streets of Paris having the time of his life.
Thank you for your reply! I also wondered about the word 'amenable', it was between that and 'spineless'. Maybe 'spineless' works better? To give you some background on my script, the protagonist lives in a small town, is sheltered (by his over-bearing mother), submissive (to his narcissistic fiance) and intimidated (by his red-neck in-laws). What he really wants to do is travel and enjoy life before he settles down. Instead of voicing this desire, our protagonist leaves his bride-zilla at the alter and tries to skip town (thus incurring her family's wrath). In the end, he learns to stop running and stand up for himself (by having a Hot Fuzz style shoot out, naturally!) The final scene sees our hero wandering the streets of Paris having the time of his life.
I love the concept, but if it's a comedy, the logline has to be/should be/ strongly suggested to be/ funny. As it reads now, it's a bit more serious sounding.
I would inject some irony here as well, playing off the terms "cold feet" or "jilted", or even the shotgun wedding theme.
"After backing out of his wedding, a wimpy schoolteacher gets a lesson on love in Appalachia- taught to him by the bride's family, from the end of double barrels."
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