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Penpusher · 210 points

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9 loglines
5 reviews

After a lifetime of putting up with her beautiful but vain twin sister, Maddy finds a way to pay her back in doses.

January 17, 2014
When an illegal immigrant unknowingly films the murder of the star witness in a high profile drug case, he struggles to survive the drug ring who will do anything to keep him silent while under the care of a racist detective.

January 17, 2014
A young orphan from the slums of India falls on his life experiences to win the ultimate prize in a televised game show.

October 2, 2013
A young man proves that in every life experience, there’s something to be learnt when he falls on his experiences to win the ultimate prize in a televised game show.

October 2, 2013
A bratty hollywood teenager finds out how good she has it when an accident forces her wandering spirit to live in a war torn African country.

September 23, 2013
Two ailing boys from two different worlds have what each needs to live. The price is just right for the exchange… except not everyone is keen on having them alive.

September 23, 2013
Two boys from two different worlds have what the other needs to live. The price looks just right for the exchange… except, not everyone is keen on having them alive.

September 23, 2013
A troubled High School guy sees the preacher’s mousey daughter in a new light when an accident brings them together but, is it too late for their love?

September 23, 2013
A troubled high school guy’s view of the preacher’s daughter is changed drastically when he finds she has little time to live.

September 23, 2013

on When an illegal immigrant unknowingly films the murder of the star witness in a high profile drug case, he struggles to survive the drug ring who will do anything to keep him silent while under the care of a racist detective.

thanks guys, will get back to the drawing board and let you see what else i come up with.
on After a lifetime of putting up with her beautiful but vain twin sister, Maddy finds a way to pay her back in doses.

thanks guys, appreciate it. will turn it around and run it by you again asap. be sure to comment.
on A bratty hollywood teenager finds out how good she has it when an accident forces her wandering spirit to live in a war torn African country.

Hi guys, thanks for stopping by. Now the objective is for her to learn a lesson in gratitude, for her to know there are worst things in life than not having a particular celebrity at her sweet 16 birthday. What…
on Four 15 year old boys join a secret anti-terrorist association, who hunt down terrorists for a living. Now they must protect the streets of Seattle from a pernicious terrorist and his nefarious army of agents before it’s too late.

Hi, two things... (1) Anti-terrorist associations obviously "hunt down terrorists for a living" -- lose it. (2) You seem to be explaining too much. The idea of a log line is short and gripping so, lose some of the words…
on After being the sole survivor of a gangland style drugstore robbery. A charismatic youth pastor retires and plots to kill the ones who left him for dead.

Too many words here. Remember, less is more with log lines. Try this out... (1) After surviving a gang style attack, a youth pastor goes for the kill OR (2) After surviving a gang style attack, a youth pastor has…