aidanthedude

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3 loglines
8 reviews

When a young underachiever takes his best pal into his parents’ home, tensions rise when the new guest (Arthurian legend and immortal mystic – Merlin the Wizard) can’t pay the rent.

May 9, 2013
When Earth is invaded by aliens, A Mafia enforcer must put his vandettas aside, unite the five families and defend the earth the only way he knows how: Violently.

March 21, 2013
When pure evil responds to the Arecibo message, a lowly NASA clerk must convince his superiors that planet Earth is facing doomsday, and nobody cares.

August 17, 2012

on Al Qaeda unwittingly recruit Inspector Clouseau for their Final Mission.

If you write this logline in such a way that it explains what Clouseau wants/needs - and what's stopping him, then what you have there is comedy gold. BUT...Clouseau is still ultimately a man with a good moral compass and…
on Olivia, 25, a pothead, decides to hitchike from her home in Sydney to Cairns via the A1 coastal highway to see her estranged mother after her father fires her from his restaurant hoping she’ll do something more with her life and quit cannabis.

Maybe make it crystal meth instead of the ol' devil's lettuce because everyone and their dog smokes in Australia. Awesome idea and roadtrip films are always an excellent setting for people finding themselves and what not, but if you center…
on A CIA secret agent is forced to choose between his girlfriend’s life or prison. He now must escape the court hearing and rescue the love of his life.

Maybe put an antagonist in there just so we know who we're against. Even if it's the state/the law he's against, personify it with a crooked cop or CIA agent. Dig it, though.
on When the son of a billionaire couple is kidnapped during their messy divorce, the ransom is an ultimatum: one parent will get to take their son home – the other must die.

That's pretty kickass. I want to see that. It's all there. The only thing I can think of is...What do the kidnappers get out of a billionaire's dead body? I guess they could just be some real messed up people,…
on When a nuclear war erupts on the first day of summer, a astronaut must guide a group of survivors towards safety, for the survival of humanity and his return voyage home.

Couldn't have said it better, Harvey. I was about to say something like 'where's the antagonist?' but I believe that by describing the survivors as 'rag tag' can imply that the struggle could be between the members of the group,…
on When young hot-shot District Attorney becomes Gotham’s white knight in the wake of the Batman’s assault on crime; the the mafia turn in desperation to the chaos loving ‘Joker’ who offers to cleanse the city of the symbols they believe in and prove that whatever doesn’t kill you simply makes you… Stranger.

Tad long for a logline. Perhaps it'd work nicely as a blurb. The last part 'whatever doesn't kill simply makes you stranger' seems a little chucked in and not entirely relevant for a logline, but would work as a tagline.…
on When pure evil responds to the Arecibo message, a lowly NASA clerk must convince his superiors that planet Earth is facing doomsday, and nobody cares.

and I guess I only named the Arecibo message...*
on When pure evil responds to the Arecibo message, a lowly NASA clerk must convince his superiors that planet Earth is facing doomsday, and nobody cares.

Thanks guys, It's all very true. I'll certainly do some work with this one. You're right, Karel + Nir, the story isn't going to be all about the protagonist trying to convince everybody of the truth, and I guess I…