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6 loglines
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A terminal twenty-something comedienne who sacrificed her social life for unfulfilled stardom struggles to dupe the quixotic gigolo she falls for into becoming her hospice nurse so she won’t have to die alone.

October 16, 2021
When a gay man’s affair is discovered by his alibi wife who only married him to have kids, he must deal with the aftermath of their separation and battle her in court for custodial rights.

September 20, 2021
When insecure Michelangelo flees to Florence after the pope asks him to paint the Sistine Chapel, he meets an unlikely mentor in a palm reader who prods him into battling his fears so he can become one of the world’s greatest artists.

September 3, 2021
A disillusioned Tibetan monk must exorcise the evil spirit driving people in his home village to suicide before his family is next.

September 3, 2021
When a languorous girl is warped through space-time reincarnating in the bodies of famous women after crying for the very first time, she needs to find a way out of limbo before she’ll be trapped forever.

August 29, 2021
An ethics prof and family man must prove his rehabilitation to a court-appointed psychiatrist when found not guilty of rape by reason of insanity and committed to a mental asylum.

August 27, 2021

on A terminal twenty-something comedienne who sacrificed her social life for unfulfilled stardom struggles to dupe the quixotic gigolo she falls for into becoming her hospice nurse so she won’t have to die alone.

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on Hiding her psychopathic ego from family and co-workers an emergency department doctor who spends her days healing, and nights hurting, must play a complicated game of cat and mouse when the police start investigating her.

Hi mobiuswest, I think this sounds like an intriguing concept. All the ingredients for a good idea are here, though some details of the logline could be polished I think. Two things would need clarification for me to make this…
on When a gay man’s affair is discovered by his alibi wife who only married him to have kids, he must deal with the aftermath of their separation and battle her in court for custodial rights.

Hi Vince Thanks for the advice. The idea is that she tries to punish him because she loses her face in front of her family, friends and coworkers, not because of him stepping out of the marriage, but because he…
on Two California girls must cooperate and stop a psychotic cat lady from releasing the big cats from their cages and terrorizing the school kids and the entire zoo.

Hi RallGamm97 I find the logline as it is written a little bit confusing. Where are the cats coming from and who are the kids? Is there a school right next to the zoo? Why do only the kids and…
on Asked to help the New York City police identify a body, a geneticist believes they’ve found a Neanderthal, but when she tries to confirm her results she’s hindered at every step by her university and an influential but secretive agency.

Hi byron79, Sounds like an interesting science thriller to me, if that is what you actually aimed for. The only thing missing in this logline I think is some indication as to why the geneticist has such a burning desire…
on A record producer must do a makeover for a ugly duckling teenage girl who was bullied and ostracized by her friends to turn her into an attractive overnight pop sensation.

Hi tony18, While you have a clearly defined goal for your protagonist and a big conflict here, I see several areas of improvement: 1. "A record producer" is not very descriptive. This is an excellent opportunity to give our hero…
on When two criminal old friends become enemies and seek advice, a clever gangster boss must hide himself to make them end each other, just to learn that time heals all wounds.

Hi Henrik S, First, I assume that a word is missing here: "... to make them end each other _ ..., " but I'll try to give you my take here anyway, even if the syntax of the sentence makes…
on A professional interplanetary Anti christ falls in love with the christ figure on a new planet and must find a way to stop Armageddon so they can live happily ever after.

Hi Hebe, Okay, let's take that logline apart... Protagonist: "A professional interplanetary antichrist..." I'm not certain I know what that means exactly, which makes interpreting the rest of the logline almost impossible. Struggle with Antagonist: "... falls in love with…
on When a reserved, yet passionate ostrich gets an opportunity to work with a renowned racing trainer, he decides to push himself to the max to win a contest against the most revered racer in the town’s history.

Hi grbrinkley. While I can see the struggle for a reserved ostrich to win a race competition, I'm not sure I would agree this trait creates the most conflict for he goal he's trying to achieve. As an extreme example,…
on When a young man meets his girlfriends family for the first time he slowly realises he is in dager and he must get out.

Hi nines, Sounds like a logline crafted after watching the movie "Get Out," which is even the same genre...