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9 loglines
24 reviews

A desperate father decides not to rob a bank after receiving a loving call from his wife, but a corrupt cop blackmails him to proceed or face arrest for the stolen car and intent to commit a felony. (36) – For a short 6 minute screenplay

June 16, 2019
When an innocent man with amnesia convicted of murder wakes inside reality TV prison series, he learns that killing inmates is the only path to proving his innocence and gaining freedom.

February 9, 2018
When his friend is kidnapped by ruthless thugs, an ex con trying to get his life together, must save her using ninja skills accidentally acquired through a backyard sobriety experiment. Comedy/Drama

October 21, 2017
A broke bounty hunter with schizophrenia and down to his final pill, must catch an elusive fugitive in extremely isolated territory before his hallucinations kick in.

August 21, 2017
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After being framed for assault, an indigenous basketballer from the Australian outback, must prove himself innocent before his scholarship to play for a college in the USA expires.

March 13, 2017
An indigenous ward of the state is released from juvenile prison and fostered to a reputable white family who threaten to lie to his parole officer and get him incarcerated, unless he helps them with a heist.

March 1, 2017
When a young ward of the state is fostered to a crazy family planning a heist, he sets out to find his real father before being forced to engage in criminal activities that will see him back in juvenile prison.

February 18, 2017
A street stupid teen struggles to sell methamphetamine looted from a crimescene to fund his dream of making it big in Hollywood, as he’s pursued by a psychopath cop.

July 1, 2016
When a teenager loots methamphetamine from a crime scene, he must sell to it to pay for his dads failing business before the owner, a psychopathic cop, hunts him down.

April 9, 2016

on When an innocent man with amnesia convicted of murder wakes inside reality TV prison series, he learns that killing inmates is the only path to proving his innocence and gaining freedom.

Thanks Nir... I've been pretty excited with all the brainstorming notes I have on this one. And yes you have some very good questions. Nothing is set in stone and there is definitely room to shuffle this one around until…
on When an innocent man with amnesia convicted of murder wakes inside reality TV prison series, he learns that killing inmates is the only path to proving his innocence and gaining freedom.

NO it's nothing like The Running man. After hours of brainstorming my concept the last two nights I was kind of disappointed it sounder similar when in its shortened version. Why I am talking to myself.
on When his friend is kidnapped by ruthless thugs, an ex con trying to get his life together, must save her using ninja skills accidentally acquired through a backyard sobriety experiment. Comedy/Drama

Thanks moviefreak81 Firstly I'm honoured to be your first and don't worry you don't need to be an expert to comment here. If you have a genuine interest in films and take the time to review peoples loglines then your…
on A moody princess meets two men at the edge of forest and takes advantage of their good nature, but one of the men take something else from her.

I am by no means an expert in this field but first glance at the logline feels like I'm about to watch? porn
on A broke bounty hunter with schizophrenia and down to his final pill, must catch an elusive fugitive in extremely isolated territory before his hallucinations kick in.

I know that stakes may not seem high but I'm struggling to fit in to my already packed logline the outcomes of him being unmedicated. There's a dark secret he carries and one he convinces himself was just a hallucination…
on After being framed for assault, an indigenous basketballer from the Australian outback, must prove himself innocent before his scholarship to play for a college in the USA expires.

Thanks for the feedback all, and again I agree with most of what you're saying. I have put together two alternative versions based on our discussions and your quality feedback. I personally think Option 2 is where I'm heading to…
on After being framed for assault, an indigenous basketballer from the Australian outback, must prove himself innocent before his scholarship to play for a college in the USA expires.

I know there's two sets of stakes here. The threat of imprisonment and losing the opportunity to play the big leagues. Is this a bad thing story wise or does it just make it more dramatic? This character has a…
on An indigenous ward of the state is released from juvenile prison and fostered to a reputable white family who threaten to lie to his parole officer and get him incarcerated, unless he helps them with a heist.

You both raise good points thank you.
on An indigenous ward of the state is released from juvenile prison and fostered to a reputable white family who threaten to lie to his parole officer and get him incarcerated, unless he helps them with a heist.

This is a review of a previous logline.
on When a young ward of the state is fostered to a crazy family planning a heist, he sets out to find his real father before being forced to engage in criminal activities that will see him back in juvenile prison.

Reviewed logline: An indigenous state ward is released from Juvenile prison and fostered to a reputable white family, who threaten to lie to his parole officer and get him incarcerated unless he helps them with a heist. I assume I…

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