Billy14

Logliner · 490 points

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23 loglines
41 reviews

When she starts being tormented by an evil force,? a business woman must seek help from her husband after he is committed to a psychiatric hospital for trying to open her third eye.

October 22, 2019
A young boy must complete an ancient and deadly rite of passage to prevent being reincarnated into a dying world when his father returns

October 6, 2019
An ambitious young street magician must undergo a rite of death and rebirth to defeat the guardian of a magical world hidden within our own.

September 14, 2019
Two occult detectives must investigate a murder at a prestigious boys boarding school when the body of a missing boy is discovered.

June 6, 2018
When a foster care teen learns of his biological father’s death, he must undergo a mystic rite of passage to claim his inheritance. (23)

September 8, 2017
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After being revived from a near drowning, a conservative Christian teen must endure being tormented by an evil dwarf-like creature when his mother doesn’t believe him. (26)

September 2, 2017
When, after being revived from a near drowning, a devout little girl is plagued by nightly visits from an evil dwarf-like creature, (22) her two disbelieving teen brothers must convince their terrified, and missing, African housekeeper to help them find a way to banish it. (44)

August 31, 2017
When an accident causes his little sister to be tormented by an evil creature only she can see, a know-it-all teenager must recreate the accident to help her. (28)

August 29, 2017
A father, convinced his young daughter has inherited his terrifying ability to commune with evil spirits, must find the man who disabled his ability, to reawaken it.

August 2, 2017
After a near drowning awakens an ability to commune with evil spirits, (12) a cowardly teenager must struggle to resist when a bushfire causes unbearably hot summer nights. (27)

August 1, 2017

on When she starts being tormented by an evil force,? a business woman must seek help from her husband after he is committed to a psychiatric hospital for trying to open her third eye.

A materialistic, success-orientated business woman must endure a terrifying spiritual transformation when her cultist ex-husband returns from the Judean desert with a lost dead sea scroll.
on When she starts being tormented by an evil force,? a business woman must seek help from her husband after he is committed to a psychiatric hospital for trying to open her third eye.

A no-nonsense business woman must find a way to stop an evil entity when her cultist ex-husband succeeds in opening her third eye.
on When Josh receives a mysterious phone call from the hospital by his estranged son, he must decide whether to sign a medical agreement that will alter his child’s life forever.

What is the action that will carry your protagonist through 50 pages of ACT 2? He must WIN something/someone He must STOP something/someone He must RETRIEVE something/someone He must ESCAPE something/someone These 4 actions will help you think about what…
on An ambitious young street magician must undergo a rite of death and rebirth to defeat the guardian of a magical world hidden within our own.

When his estranged father returns and performs an act of true magic, an ambitious young street magician must undergo a dangerous rite of death and rebirth to defeat the malevolent creature guarding the source of true magic. After the rite,…
on An ambitious young street magician must undergo a rite of death and rebirth to defeat the guardian of a magical world hidden within our own.

REVISED <after checking the formula> When his estranged father returns and performs an act of true magic, <12> an ambitious young street magician <6> must undergo a rite of death and rebirth <8> to defeat the guardian of a magical…
on Two occult detectives must investigate a murder at a prestigious boys boarding school when the body of a missing boy is discovered.

Please help me get started on this. The detectives cannot believe that the cause of death was supernatural. The face of the dead boy however looks like that girl in the closet from The Ring and the cause of death…
on When androids of a wild west theme park start gaining conscience, the scientist behind the show must overcome the senior manager’s intention to shut down the current program.

DPG I LOVE YOU!!!
on When a foster care teen learns of his biological father’s death, he must undergo a mystic rite of passage to claim his inheritance. (23)

Dpg and Nir, Thanks for your input. It's really great having, not one but, two experienced logliners to bounce ideas around with. Everyone in my life is pretty much completely uninterested in stories. I NEED YOU GUYS SO BAD!!! Without…
on When a foster care teen learns of his biological father’s death, he must undergo a mystic rite of passage to claim his inheritance. (23)

What's with the "fantasy world" advice? Lol It's not a fantasy. Okay, so my first thought was that he goes through with the Rite because he's after the money. But with the new scenario it would be curiosity. What was…
on When a foster care teen learns of his biological father’s death, he must undergo a mystic rite of passage to claim his inheritance. (23)

Okay, how about this scenario: A teen and his mother and her second husband. The teen has been raised to be extroverted, a socially adept member of society. But he is an introvert and secretly yearns for something more, something…