Byron

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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.

June 11, 2015

on As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.

As he chronicles one tenacious man's fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity. Same thread for the story, different…
on As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.

When mankind destroys their planet (main event), alien observers are ordered to halt a 100,000-year experiment they have been running, collect viable specimens from the human survivors and terraform the planet (stakes), one troubled survivor (hero) must convince them spare…
on As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.

Thanks, no feedback is bad and straightforward is good.
on As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.

I like your thought process, I have been playing with the idea that they do in fact convince them to leave...after cleaning up the earth, or better yet they convince them to leave and let man figure out how to…
on As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.

For some reason can't reply to you recent post. The motivation of the aliens is: they are longing for beings that can join them as equals. Think of them as shepherds/farmers maybe - they won't "give" a race technology unless…
on As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.

Experiment is coming to a halt because man has destroyed his world; they either have to terminate or reset humanity. Lots to play on there in the book - the man is only one of many potential to reseed earth…
on As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.

Alright, I think I may have nailed what I am trying to convey in a short, concise sentence: An unwitting participant in an alien experiment must vanquish the ghosts of his past in order to save the woman he loves…
on As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.

There are two threads, one is the experiment which is covert, the other is the man with the troubled past (he killed his brother in a hunting accident). He becomes the focal point of the experiment as it winds to…
on As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.

I think what I posted was unclear; that was the old logline (I have fixed the post)...the new one was at the top. You make good points though which I am pondering. This might be better, but leaves out much…
on Being shot in the head is different for one young woman who lives in the moment, since instead of dying, she receives the responsibility of keeping heaven and hell from falling apart, or else an evil far worse than anyone can imagine will destroy everything and everyone.

I am still learning all the nuances of loglines myself, but I am sure this can be tightened. Wouldn't something like this say it also?: After dying, a simple woman must prevent all out war between heaven and hell or…

As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.