carllord

Samurai · 730 points

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32 loglines
23 reviews

A terminally ill Irish banker with only six months to live must convince her jilted ex-fiance and American baseball star to return back to Ireland to meet his unknown, 10-year-old daughter.

April 7, 2020
An alluring Irish banker who is terminally ill must race against time to convince her ex-boyfriend and American baseball star that her 10-year-old daughter is his.

April 6, 2020
Disbelieving his addicted mother that he is fatherless, a faith-driven basketball star must jeopardize his championship hopes to uncover the heartrending truth about his long-lost dad.

March 30, 2020
A forsaken young man struggles to overcome the anguish of childhood abduction, abuse, and a changed identity to become a college basketball All-American.

March 30, 2020
A basketball star must battle his vengeful mother’s attempt to sabotage his championship hopes when a posthumous letter from his long-lost dad reveals the young man was abducted and raised under a false identity.

March 27, 2020
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A college basketball star jeopardizes his championship hopes as he struggles to rescue his drug-addicted mother while searching for his biological dad.

March 24, 2020
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A basketball star jeopardizes his championship hopes as he struggles with his drug-addicted mother and searches for his biological father.

March 21, 2020
Faith and basketball inspire an abandoned boy to set three improbable goals both on and off the hardwood with surprising results.

March 20, 2020
A college basketball star, abducted and raised under an alias by his addicted mother must jeopardize his shot at the championship when he sets out to find his long-lost dad.

March 20, 2020
A faith-driven basketball star must prove his true identity or miss the playoffs when he discovers his godless mother abducted and raised him under an alias.

March 20, 2020

on Disbelieving his addicted mother that he is fatherless, a faith-driven basketball star must jeopardize his championship hopes to uncover the heartrending truth about his long-lost dad.

Hey Mike, Thank you for challenging me on this logline. Thankfully, a very established film producer has already read my screenplay and has expressed great interest in producing it. Of course nothing is guaranteed until the contract is signed. Unless…
on A basketball star must battle his vengeful mother’s attempt to sabotage his championship hopes when a posthumous letter from his long-lost dad reveals the young man was abducted and raised under a false identity.

Thank you yqwertz. I think I'm through actually posting anymore versions for a while. I did come up with another version (see below), which might be more effective? Logline: After a college basketball star plays on national television, his championship…
on A basketball star must battle his vengeful mother’s attempt to sabotage his championship hopes when a posthumous letter from his long-lost dad reveals the young man was abducted and raised under a false identity.

Would this logline make more sense? When a college basketball star, abducted as a child by his addicted mother is seen playing in a nationally televised game, he must prove his true identity or miss the playoffs when a distant…
on A basketball star jeopardizes his championship hopes as he struggles with his drug-addicted mother and searches for his biological father.

Thank you, Ty! Simple, but clear. I should try to remember that as I write loglines for my other screenplays. Lol!
on Thomas Gunn gets a call from an old friend to come solve a murder down in Mississippi

Maybe something like this: "A revered New York private investigator, with an unblemished record at solving murders, encounters his toughest case yet when summoned to the Mississippi Delta by the actual killer."
on Abducted as a small child, a college hoop star must endure a season of unexpected obstacles when he sets out to find his long-lost dad.

Thank you Leebo159. I like the slight arrangement of wording for my logline.
on Abducted as a small child, a college hoop star must endure a season of unexpected obstacles when he sets out to find his long-lost dad.

Great feedback from everyone. Without posting another version, here is another attempt. Logline attempt #1: Disbelieving his depraved mother that he is illegitimate, a godly college hoop star follows his faith to discover a dark family secret surrounding the truth…
on Jeopardizing his shot at reaching the “Final Four,” a devout star athlete, raised under an assumed identity, must outwit his vengeful, on the lam mother to find his missing dad.

His mother mother abducted him when he was two years old to avoid being apprehended by the law for a crime. In my screenplay, she always told her son that he was illegitimate, but as he got older he didn't…
on Before she dies, a terminally ill Irish banker, after keeping her 10-year-old daughter’s birth a secret, must arrange for the young girl to meet her ex-baseball star/American father.

Thank you for all of your help and suggestions. I'll continue to grind away at this. Best regards, Carl!
on Before she dies, a terminally ill Irish banker, after keeping her 10-year-old daughter’s birth a secret, must arrange for the young girl to meet her ex-baseball star/American father.

Hey Guys! Here is another logline version for "LIFE'S CURVE," based on DPG's formula (see below) to construct a logline: "A terminally ill Irish single-mother must reveal to her American baseball star/ex-boyfriend that she is dying with a 10-year-old daughter…