Chris_P

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7 loglines
9 reviews

Jinn returns home, confident he can save his daughter’s soul and bring her back to life, but at the cost of his sanity. [v2] [Short Film] [ Dark Fantasy] [Horror]

June 8, 2020
Lelia, a vampire warrior, is forced to leave home to end an ongoing war between the human kingdoms before her own kind decide to end it their way. [v2.0] [TV] [Fantasy]

June 7, 2020
Lelia is forced to leave her home and end an ongoing war in Heartland, or her own people will be brought to ruin.

June 7, 2020
Jinn returns home confident he can save his daughter but at the cost of his own sanity. [Short Film] [Fantasy] [Horror?]

June 6, 2020
When an ongoing war in Heartland starts having drastic effects on those not involved, Lelia is forced to pursue a means to peace before her own people are brought to ruin.

June 4, 2020
After being threatened by an unknown adversary, a vampire warlord if forced to move against his rivals else it would mean certain death for him and his kin.

December 25, 2018
When a mysterious woman threatens to break everything he has strived for, Aldrin must either overcome their differences or the hopes and dreams of his people will die with him.

December 25, 2018

on When a global pandemic strikes, a construction crew in the midst of building a mysterious billionaire’s remote New Zealand bunker attempt to save themselves by sheltering inside it. However, they risk their own lives when their client arrives wanting to use it and they refuse to leave.

Well, the premise looks interesting, but I have to agree with savinh0. I don't even see how this would even work as a Feature script. You marked it as being a thriller, so I assume it will be something more…
on Jinn returns home confident he can save his daughter but at the cost of his own sanity. [Short Film] [Fantasy] [Horror?]

OUTDATED LOGLINE: New Post avalable
on Lelia is forced to leave her home and end an ongoing war in Heartland, or her own people will be brought to ruin.

OUTDATED LOGLINE: New Version Posted
on When an ongoing war in Heartland starts having drastic effects on those not involved, Lelia is forced to pursue a means to peace before her own people are brought to ruin.

POST OUTDATED! Update logline posted.
on Professor Taian Russo returns from a mysterious island with artifacts possessed by Heather, a 17th century Scottish ghost who after being accused of witchcraft was exiled to the island. Taian must find her peace before her possessive powers take full control.

Okay, so great draft and an interesting concept, but here are a few notes. 1, a logline should only be a single sentence. Your goal is to tell us who the main character is, what the conflict is, and what…
on Two goofball Navy seals go back in time to Valley Forge and help out George Washington.

Okay, so from my understanding, a logline (regardless of genre) should be introducing the main characters, the conflict, and the stakes. All I am seeing here are the main characters. If I am wrong and there are different expectations for…
on In a motorhome, a lonely introvert struggles to fit in with his cousin’s crass friends during the journey to a music festival.

The concept sounds interesting, so I aplaw you there. Is this a feature film idea or like a short TV show?
on When a meek chemistry teacher is diagnosed with lung cancer, he must earn $740,000 by cooking meth to provide for his family after his death. ★ Accepted

I like it. Catchy, intriguing, and overall it looks like it could be a fun show to watch. Kinda gives me Queen of the South vibes though the initial storyline is of course, different.
on Set in the year 1693: When they flee the Salem witch trials and end up in the land of the Wendigo, a naive Witch must use the dangerous power of the Black Flame in order to protect her and her sisters from ferocious demon.

interesting idea. Not very knowlageable about loglines myself as of yet but this looks like it would be a cool film. Props! I would vote, only I can't find the button to do so...