Christopher F. Mills

Penpusher · 50 points

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Supernatural aliens come to earth seeking the one man who can save their species, so it’s a good thing all Johny Beaumont ever wanted to do was leave home. But first he must do battle with The World, So it’s a very good thing he is supernatural himself

October 11, 2013

on When the NSA director admits to domestic spying then solicits the aid of the best hackers, a small band of hackers decide to fight what they feel is wrong only to be entwined in an international terrorist threat and discover their initial instincts were wrong.

you used 'wrong' twice. that's wrong. :) it's vague. tighten it up. identify.
on When a cloning experiment by genetic scientist goes horribly wrong, the military sends their best man to clean up and avert an international crisis.

seems vague??