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6 loglines
32 reviews

A successful golf instructor reconnects with his appetite and love of the game, when he agrees to share his round with a younger raw sportswoman.

December 20, 2012
When a ruthless hitman is shot by one of his targets, he is left in limbo. He soon finds out to release his spirit he will have to shoot his own son.

September 7, 2012
Singer’s Gene – when a repressed young singer is offered the chance of a record deal her world changes. Complications arise when she is sucked into the temptations of the industry and the constant attention from her parents and an unknown organisation paying close attention to her career.

June 22, 2012
FOUR BALLS – When a forgotten employee finds himself playing with his boss in a work’s golf tournament, he decides to hire a so-called professional to join him. Complications arise when the professinal turns out to be a disaster prone walking accident.

June 21, 2012
Dirty Filthy Supermodel. When an untidy grumpy dustbin man is knocked down by a truck, he meets a fashion conscience God at the perly gates. He’s given one month to get his face on a fashion magazine to gain entry to heaven or face expulsion to hell.

June 1, 2012
Automated Companion

May 28, 2012

on An overwhelmed single-father, hesitantly adopts the 10-year-old daughter of a former love who is about to die, only to learn the young girl is actually his.

Or you could make the story about a commitment phobic single man who agrees to adopt an ex-lovers child. Complications arise when the child turns out to be his. Story would be more a drama about his struggle to accept…
on An overwhelmed single-father, hesitantly adopts the 10-year-old daughter of a former love who is about to die, only to learn the young girl is actually his.

As far I'm aware you tell acts 1 & 2 of the story. You wouldn't see the logline for Sixth Sense explaining he's already dead.
on When a stripper learns the exact date of her death from a mysterious patron, she seeks to tie up the loose ends and find meaning in her life.

The most interesting part of this for me, is how she finds out the exact date of her death. The ability to do this sounds much more interesting than her tying up loose ends. So either you need to make…
on By simply touching someone, Lissa can tell who their true love is, but it doesn’t work on her. As she rises in popularity, Skeptic Magazine sends out their top reporter, Tom, a naturally handsome man, for the story. He soon discovers her to be much more interesting than her story. But after a lifetime of heartbreak, Lissa wants nothing to do with him. Right?

" A heartbroken clairvoyant's life is tested when a sceptic journalist not only questions her ability but is predicted to be the love of her life." If you inlcude some irony it sounds better. Also sounds like a more interesting…
on A successful golf instructor reconnects with his appetite and love of the game, when he agrees to share his round with a younger raw sportswoman.

Round of golf is eighteen holes.
on When an idealistic free spirit discovers his best friend is terminally ill, he must inspire her through music to live, before she gives up hope.

Telegraphed means you've told us everything. Only thing left is for her to die. Maybe she could inspire her to write her own song or play an instrument. He wants her not to give up hope presumably of life but…
on A scarred American divorcé and a resolute Irish Banker who is terminally ill, race against time to rekindle their once vibrant romance before she dies.

I like that much better. Sounds like a plausible drama people would be willing to watch. It outlines the goal and the obstacle while referencing the ghosts of the past. Good job.
on A brilliant but destructive singer, struggling to get signed, must overcome her addictions before she destroys her band and her life.

Sounds like the sister could play a large part in the film so I'd include her here. 'A brilliant but destructive singer battles her demons, with help from her sister, in order to get clean and realise her dream. You…
on A scarred American divorcé and a resolute Irish Banker who is terminally ill, race against time to rekindle their once vibrant romance before she dies.

Yeh, I can see the motivation here. Feels like they need more of a concrete goal than rekindle their romance. Maybe you can say what exactly this involves. Only other thing I wasn't sure about was whether the American was…
on When an idealistic free spirit discovers his best friend is terminally ill, he must inspire her through music to live, before she gives up hope.

Yes I can see why a idealistic free spirit could have problems coming to terms with a friend dying. If the protagonist is the free spirit, I'd like to be given a clue as to what lesson he'll learn through…