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A blood spatter analyst by day / serial killer by night longs to share his dark secret, but can’t for fear of losing those he loves…
Well, it may be about that to you, but I don't know if "A Serial killer fears being truly known," is going to get a studio exec to write a big check. Just IMHO.
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A blood spatter analyst by day / serial killer by night longs to share his dark secret, but can’t for fear of losing those he loves…
I kind of feel like the pizzazz and the hook of the premise has been "drained out" of this logline. I'd favor something like, "A serial killer with a conscience in the form of his dead father culls his victims…
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When a socially inept nerdy teen falls for the newest cool girl in town, he must battle her 7 evil exes before he can date her.
7 evil exes, not ex-boyfriends. One is a girl ; )
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A child psychologist wants to help Cole, a young boy who reminds him of a boy he once failed, looking into Cole’s life Cole looks into his. Cole’s secret, “I see dead people.”
Too specific, I think. "A psychologist must overcome his greatest challenge; curing a ten year old boy who claims to have visions of dead people; the only problem is, his claims are true."
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A smart, new classy version of an old west historical tale that has never been told, between a well-dressed clean man of small stature and his dirty giant brutal enemy with a personal vendetta;of which takes place in a large alluring and immaculately clean gambling hall and infamous brothel, where heaven and hell plays about.
Monimata, I want to see your movie ; )
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When his meth lab burns down, a rising drug lord must erase evidence from a laptop before the DEA finds it.
"A High School chemistry teacher turned drug lord must erase a laptop containing evidence against him before the DEA finds it. Only problem is, it's under 24 hour guard locked somewhere within a police evidence room." It's more than one…
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A futuristic, oppressive & decadent state demands teenagers for their blood sport. Making a resourceful girl take her little sister’s spot to kill to survive ‘the hunger games’.
How about "In a dystopian future, a rebellious teenage huntress from a poverty stricken district must compete in a gladiatorial contest against trained killers in order to save her sister's life."
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When an aquaphobic janitor discovers he has the ability
to control water, he must overcome his fear to save his
fiance from a fire manipulating madman
I'm agreeing with Heather. I'm not sure producers are imaginative enough to understand what you mean by "control water." Maybe you should say something specific about what he can do with water. Also, your title "Horn of the Leviathan" doesn't…
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A smart, new classy version of an old west historical tale that has never been told, between a well-dressed clean man of small stature and his dirty giant brutal enemy with a personal vendetta;of which takes place in a large alluring and immaculately clean gambling hall and infamous brothel, where heaven and hell plays about.
The idea seems interesting, I just feel you need to boil it down so an agent, producer or manager can take one look and instantly understand what the movie is about.
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A smart, new classy version of an old west historical tale that has never been told, between a well-dressed clean man of small stature and his dirty giant brutal enemy with a personal vendetta;of which takes place in a large alluring and immaculately clean gambling hall and infamous brothel, where heaven and hell plays about.
Start over. No reader wants to hear how impressed you are with your own idea. They'll decide if it's smart, new and classy. (Also, a "new version of a tale that's never been told" doesn't make sense to me). A…
