Daniel Helis

Penpusher · 80 points

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5 reviews

An air guitar band is rising up to be one of the greats in the music industry, but when a rival band gets signed to the same label, they struggle to keep their novelty act valid.

March 22, 2013

on An air guitar band is rising up to be one of the greats in the music industry, but when a rival band gets signed to the same label, they struggle to keep their novelty act valid.

Thank you both for your input :)
on When a young Dutch woman killed a group of Nazis with the Dutch resistance, they caused an entire town to be sent to a concentration camp, they must save their countrymen anyway they can.

yeah it was a joke i actually like this quite a bit
on When a sailor’s young son is taken out to sea by ghosts on his father’s boat, the father struggles to get his son back after the superstitious townspeople refuse to be involved with a “haunted” boat.

given the original draft i saw i have to say that this is a vast improvement. i kinda hope you make this a film
on When a young Dutch woman killed a group of Nazis with the Dutch resistance, they caused an entire town to be sent to a concentration camp, they must save their countrymen anyway they can.

Poor choice of everything, you need to rethink your life
on When an ex-horseman makes a deal with satan, a diverse army of supernatural beings are summoned into the realm and The Four Horsemen are called to take them down.

It's a low concept idea and it's not very interesting. The phrasing is poor and it's written like an amateur with no critical thinking.