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An inexperienced yet aspiring screenwriter, with an industry record of absolute failure in logline creation must defeat his greatest adversary, himself, and surpass with his last entry the infallible scrutiny of the top tier, professional reviewers of the “Logline.it!” website’s as “A million dollars for The Perfect Logline Contest” deadline draws to a close in one minute.
Thank you Hullaballo. Most appreciated. I'm trying to get the hang of this. Loglines are more difficult than I had anticipating. Hopefully, I'll perfect one soon. Absolutely grateful for your broad grin. Smile back at ya!
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A troubled teen is mysteriously abducted and transported to a secluded training facility, where he and a band of juvenile misfits encounter an otherworldly enemy in a struggle for survival.
Try to make the logline as succinct as possible. Eliminate the the word "transported", since an abduction already gives us that he was "taken". Obvious somewhere. For the lead, how about adding a personal trait that makes him stand out,…
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A mentorship between a pragmatic and manipulative businessman and an underprivileged high school genius evolves into a battle of wits as both try to prove their intellectual superiority over the other.
In agreement with Nir Shelter. I'm no expert, but while being here I'm picking up knowledge and from my perspective, what's the goal for their intellectual chess match? What is the fate of them meeting and engaging in that battle…
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An out-world war destines a bio-molecular energy, ineffectual in fusion with any previous life form to Planet Earth, where a benevolent and jubilant father-to-be unwittingly absorbs it and must engage in battle with the implacable beings pursuing the power source for galactic dominion.
Have to add, that everyone's replies are the collective right answer. I'm learning much.
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An out-world war destines a bio-molecular energy, ineffectual in fusion with any previous life form to Planet Earth, where a benevolent and jubilant father-to-be unwittingly absorbs it and must engage in battle with the implacable beings pursuing the power source for galactic dominion.
Back to rewrite. Again, thanks to all. Great insight as always.
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“An ordinary young man, is physiologically transmuted by an unimaginable energy that predates history and is irrevocably forced to become humankind’s sole savior when a diabolical alien race, seeking that power wants to blow up the Earth.”
Everyone - I'm reworking the specifics. Let me tweak it and give it a brand new go. All your tips ARE helpful. Truth!
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“An ordinary young man, is physiologically transmuted by an unimaginable energy that predates history and is irrevocably forced to become humankind’s sole savior when a diabolical alien race, seeking that power wants to blow up the Earth.”
dpg, I see. Point well taken. I'm gonna work on this. Thank a lot.
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An ordinary young man, is forced to become humankind’s sole savior when a diabolical alien race, wants to blow up the Earth.
Nir Shelter - Once again, I'm profoundly grateful for your sound advice. Darn this seems so easy to do and now I discover how profound a logline creation can be. I'm brainstorming all this and have to get back to…
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An ordinary young man, is forced to become humankind’s sole savior when a diabolical alien race, wants to blow up the Earth.
Greetings CraigDGriffth. Gotcha. I'm refocusing to actually achieve that. Story elements, Check. Thanks a bunch.
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An ordinary young man, is forced to become humankind’s sole savior when a diabolical alien race, wants to blow up the Earth.
FFF, I get you. I just replied to the previous, longer logline. Being new here I posted two loglines for the same purpose, so while I get the hang of the site's mechanics, any modifications to the logline will be…
