David Truasheim

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When a young Dutch woman killed a group of Nazis with the Dutch resistance, they caused an entire town to be sent to a concentration camp, they must save their countrymen anyway they can.

March 22, 2013

on A mute man is graced with the power to read minds. As he climbs the social ladder he struggles to work out his place in society.

It should be a comma not a full stop. You shouldn't have two sentences.
on Barack Obama is a powerful president by day and crimefighting superhero by night and when presented with the opportunity to change he must decide whether it will be for good or evil.

A more concrete goal should be established.