Ed Vassie

Penpusher · 130 points

170 points to Logliner

5 loglines
4 reviews

When his mother dies in his arms, an insomniac paramedic abandons the scene of the car accident that claimed her to wander the city streets in search of his estranged siblings.

March 2, 2016
When the girl of his dreams buys him a drink, an agoraphobic movie projectionist must overcome the trauma of the death of his parents in order to take her on a date outside the arthouse cinema that he calls home.

March 2, 2016
When left for dead in the Rocky Mountain wilderness, a fur trapper must call on all his will to survive to track down the man who murdered his son in front of him.

February 24, 2016
When an injured photographer believes he’s witnessed a murder, he must overcome his limited mobility and cooperate with his girlfriend to bring the killer to justice.

February 24, 2016
A bus driver trying to get home for his daughter’s birthday is confronted with his sinister past when a sadistic passenger with a score to settle refuses to get off at the last stop.

August 5, 2015

on When an injured photographer believes he’s witnessed a murder, he must overcome his limited mobility and cooperate with his girlfriend to bring the killer to justice.

Thanks Nir, replacing "injured" with "wheelchair bound" could achieve this.
on Son of an Indian couple – who deeply believes in Gandhian ideals of nonviolence, accidentally kills a powerful man to protect his father. While the family on run, the son and father fiercely stands against each other’s way to fight out the enemy.

I think there is a great story here, but there is too much going on in this logline. If you focus on why the family is going on the run and what their goal is, the father and son's conflict…
on When the suicide of Trent Warner is discovered, a group of his friends must fulfill his dying wish by delivering 100 letters he composed before his suicide, in doing so they will discover that Trent Warner’s death is not as simple as the police report makes it out to be.

I agree that the name of the Trent Warner character is not so important and shouldn't dominate the logline. The major conflict is the uncovering of the truth behind his death and this should be the main focus. Love the…
on A bus driver trying to get home for his daughter’s birthday is confronted with his sinister past when a sadistic passenger with a score to settle refuses to get off at the last stop.

Thank you both for you're comments. I'm redrafting as a result. Very helpful. It's so hard balancing too much detail and not enough. Forever re-writing!