dnice1728

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5 loglines
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An ex couple accidentally gets locked in the basement at a New Years Party and are forced to speak about their past, present and future.

December 29, 2014
A shy tech creator finds romance with a free spirited artist during his commute to work.

July 23, 2014
A young man that is unhappy from his desk job being a pushover and not taking seriously comes home frustrated to the point he decides to kill his young neighbor, however she gets free due to his ignorance of killing someone.

January 12, 2013
A mature man who tries to balance working his normal job in the day while working on torturing young woman at night.

January 11, 2013
A sweet woman stops by her OCD neighbor’s house to deliver him his mail only to wake up on a table seeing her neighbor with surgical tools.

January 11, 2013

on An ex couple accidentally gets locked in the basement at a New Years Party and are forced to speak about their past, present and future.

Does it sound compelling? Because I was originally thinking that but I didn't think as far as a short film..if it would stick and keeps people attention.
on An ex couple accidentally gets locked in the basement at a New Years Party and are forced to speak about their past, present and future.

Yea, sort of but modern day version with a twist.
on An ex couple accidentally gets locked in the basement at a New Years Party and are forced to speak about their past, present and future.

Can you give me some examples of time bomb in that situation? please
on An ex couple accidentally gets locked in the basement at a New Years Party and are forced to speak about their past, present and future.

I like former lovers. I wasn't sure how to get the right term for the log line. I appreciate the feedback. I am looking to shoot a short film.
on An ex couple accidentally gets locked in the basement at a New Years Party and are forced to speak about their past, present and future.

I was going for drama but comedy could work.
on A young man that is unhappy from his desk job being a pushover and not taking seriously comes home frustrated to the point he decides to kill his young neighbor, however she gets free due to his ignorance of killing someone.

I see, so how does " A young milquetoast unhappy with his life decides to a life of a friendly neighbor."
on A young man that is unhappy from his desk job being a pushover and not taking seriously comes home frustrated to the point he decides to kill his young neighbor, however she gets free due to his ignorance of killing someone.

The thing is I didn't know how to much to say. I was trying to explain the conflict instead of giving up the ending. When you say the other direction what do you mean?
on A mature man who tries to balance working his normal job in the day while working on torturing young woman at night.

Thanks you for the feedback I have updated the log line. Hopefully I can gain even more insight from you all.