ElizabethBan

Penpusher · 255 points

45 points to Logliner

6 loglines
16 reviews

When an evil, post-apocalyptic tyrant targets him for his scientific secrets, the last survivor of a 300 year-old life-extension experiment must find a way to keep his knowledge safe.

November 11, 2012
A young intern faces a double dilemma when he discovers medical fraud by a colleague and realises that the victim is his own despised father.

November 1, 2012
Hunted by a post-apocalyptic ruling clique, the last survivor of a 21st century longevity experiment must decide whether to destroy the knowledge that had kept him alive for 300 years.

October 27, 2012
On the verge of peaceful retirement, an Australian businessman must return to his native Hungary to save his son from his old nemesis, the leader of a ruthless Neo-Nazi gang.

August 26, 2012
When an orphaned, mixed race American teen is sent to live with his Holocaust survivor grandmother in Sydney, he must learn to overcome his own racial and cultural prejudices and accept his rich family heritage.

August 26, 2012
When a soldier on leave from the Android Wars finds that his family and neighbourhood near Washington DC are missing, he must track down the hapless alien scientist responsible for the mishap.

August 26, 2012

on The President’s Chopper crashes over enemy’s territory, he must fight his way out or be killed.

Interesting idea, but I think we've seen this movie in several incarnations. I don't see anything new about it, except the helicopter. If the helicopter crashes, it can't fight anymore, so there's no novelty. Sorry to be a downer. I…
on Revision: An unhappy couple enters the Wife Carrying Contest, per the request of a young rookie psychologist, in hopes that it will revitalize their marriage.

I like the last version, but does it convey what the movie is about. It's still missing something for me. Sorry, I can't put my finger on it.
on A doctor battles his fear of needles to rescue his daughter from a former physician, the source of his phobia, bound to his daughter by blood.

I agree with everything that has been said before, but I don't think that overall it would be very helpful for Lucius. I looked at the other (4) versions and perhaps the logline could go along the lines of: When…
on When an evil, post-apocalyptic tyrant targets him for his scientific secrets, the last survivor of a 300 year-old life-extension experiment must find a way to keep his knowledge safe.

I love it, thanks.
on When an evil, post-apocalyptic tyrant targets him for his scientific secrets, the last survivor of a 300 year-old life-extension experiment must find a way to keep his knowledge safe.

Why?
on Hunted by a post-apocalyptic ruling clique, the last survivor of a 21st century longevity experiment must decide whether to destroy the knowledge that had kept him alive for 300 years.

That sounds good to me, but I thought you are supposed to put the inciting incident into the Logline and give an idea of the journey the main character has to take. OK, he must decide, but why? The problem…
on In a past life Raymond Red believed in reincarnation. But in the life he is living now, being reborn is not part of the program.

I think you have described Raymond's inner journey, but there is no outer one to hook it onto. In other words, what is Raymond doing now and how does he realise he had a past life. I mean, OK he…
on A young intern faces a double dilemma when he discovers medical fraud by a colleague and realises that the victim is his own despised father.

Right. He has to stop the fraudster but his hatred for the father gets in the way, so he has to overcome that too. OK, back to the drawing board. Ta. Let me think.
on When his meth lab burns down, a rising drug lord must erase evidence from a laptop before the DEA finds it.

Or maybe.....'A rising drug lord must steal and destroy a tightly guarded laptop from a police evidence room before the DEA finds it to incriminate him.' 25 wrds.
on On the verge of peaceful retirement, an Australian businessman must return to his native Hungary to save his son from his old nemesis, the leader of a ruthless Neo-Nazi gang.

Yes, I am still thinking about a reply.