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A mentally troubled banker from Chicago finds himself hard to go by everyday due to his traumatic past, he manages the people who made him who he is now which leads him into a plot to sabotage there financial lives and turn his without being notice by the bank, the victim and overcoming his own greed.
OH well the logline made it seem to me that he is now managing the people who 'made him' which mean that he wouldn't be that good without them, so the way you worded it makes him seem evil
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A mentally troubled banker from Chicago finds himself hard to go by everyday due to his traumatic past, he manages the people who made him who he is now which leads him into a plot to sabotage there financial lives and turn his without being notice by the bank, the victim and overcoming his own greed.
I think you can get rid of the word ' mentally', because the point is clear if it's ' a troubled banker'., especially you mention his traumatic past. Also, he 'finds it hard to get by' rather than 'finds himself…
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When writing teacher Karels students start failing, he must kick it into overdrive in order to get his students to pass before the end of the Semester.
sensational, flawless.
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Olivia, 25, a pothead, decides to hitchike from her home in Sydney to Cairns via the A1 coastal highway to see her estranged mother after her father fires her from his restaurant hoping she’ll do something more with her life and quit cannabis.
i specified the freeway because of where it is, and that her father fires her means that in doing it for her father she's actually doing it for herself, her flaw being she doesn't admit she's not doing enough. cheers…
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Olivia, 25, a pothead, decides to hitchike from her home in Sydney to Cairns via the A1 coastal highway to see her estranged mother after her father fires her from his restaurant hoping she’ll do something more with her life and quit cannabis.
the dangers of hitchiking by herself? Is that not enough
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Olivia, 25, a pothead, decides to hitchike from her home in Sydney to Cairns via the A1 coastal highway to see her estranged mother after her father fires her from his restaurant hoping she’ll do something more with her life and quit cannabis.
I specified the highway because the story will be about her trip, which will be taking place all the way up north on the coast going through nsw and queensland which is where (basically) all of australians live. I specified…
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Sa’ida Muhzbet, a typical teenage girl that likes to paint trains and rob houses replaces her mums old cooking utensils, this is one mistake she will live to regret.
She's not typical if she likes to paint trains and rob houses, especially with a name like Sa'ida Muhzbet. I think " Sa'ida Muhzbet, a teenager" or " Sa'ida Muhzbet, a teenage girl", and what do you mean by she…
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After his plane crashes in the middle of the Amazon, a successful lawyer with no survival skills must find his way back to civilisation in time to donate his liver to his dieing son.
dying*
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A young woman and her teenaged sister must reach the fabled surface of their ruined planet when their underground home is destroyed by religious fanatics.
teenage*
