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Penpusher · 130 points

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When a policeman’s family is kidnapped by a sadistic crimelord he must kill a rival crime boss to save his family.

November 21, 2012
When an honest policeman’s family is kidnapped by a sadistic crime lord, he must murder the chief of police, his father in law, to save his family from being killed

October 29, 2012
When a policeman’s family is kidnapped by a sadistic crime lord he must kill the chief of police, his father in law, to save them.

October 14, 2012
A solitary ruthless cyborg is hunted by a government agency, but to trust others and become human again is his only hope of escape

September 13, 2012
When a master assassin’s family is captured by an evil king he must commit a series of murders whilst trying to free his family and escape

September 5, 2012

on When a policeman’s family is kidnapped by a sadistic crime lord he must kill the chief of police, his father in law, to save them.

Thanks guys both excellent comments and I'll use the advice in both of them
on A newly divorced mother of two risks losing the support of her ex-husband and two daughters when she pursues an alternative family with a butch graphic designer who inspires her to move the way her pulse beats and finally be herself

Better but should you mention that it's a relationship with the other women, kinda sounds like a love story in the first draft, you want to let us know is it a buddy movie or a love story, the original…
on A newly divorced mother of two risks losing the support of her ex-husband and two daughters when she pursues an alternative family with a butch graphic designer who inspires her to move the way her pulse beats and finally be herself

This is too long with too much going , is it about the conflict between her old family or about her growing into this new person, which is more important. I know that both these elements are part of your…