Gunns

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A world class triathlon athlete competes in a town where he was a torturer in his former life. Karma catches up, not only with him, but his whole team.

June 30, 2015
Brothers battle it out for their senile dad’s inheritance while they encounter unforeseen changes in their DNA due to an alien entity.

April 18, 2015
Two farmers in Iceland are framed by the Sheriff and sent to Denmark to slave in chains for the rest of their life. The younger one returns after 20 years to realize he has a son and wants revenge.

April 10, 2015

on A world class triathlon athlete competes in a town where he was a torturer in his former life. Karma catches up, not only with him, but his whole team.

Thanks dpg and Brooks for the pointers - it always gets better the more people see and advise :)
on Brothers battle it out for their senile dad’s inheritance while they encounter unforeseen changes in their DNA due to an alien entity.

How about this: Brothers battle it out over their senile dad's life and inheritance as their DNA enhances the good and evil within them after they find a sphere from outer space.
on Brothers battle it out for their senile dad’s inheritance while they encounter unforeseen changes in their DNA due to an alien entity.

Brothers battle it out over their senile dad's life and inheritance as their DNA enhances the good and evil within them after they find a sphere from outer space.
on Brothers battle it out for their senile dad’s inheritance while they encounter unforeseen changes in their DNA due to an alien entity.

Thanks dpg for you input. I'll use it in when I revise the logline. There are always so many factors one wants to bring up in two sentences :)
on Brothers battle it out for their senile dad’s inheritance while they encounter unforeseen changes in their DNA due to an alien entity.

Thanks for the feedback. I'll certainly consider it and tinkle with it a bit more. But I like unanswered questions to get people interested - curiosity is a great force.
on Two farmers in Iceland are framed by the Sheriff and sent to Denmark to slave in chains for the rest of their life. The younger one returns after 20 years to realize he has a son and wants revenge.

Thanks dpg and Nir as well as Rudger. I'm glad you see more than just the potential of the story to be a feature. A series is of course much more prestige. But the feature would of course make my…
on Two farmers in Iceland are framed by the Sheriff and sent to Denmark to slave in chains for the rest of their life. The younger one returns after 20 years to realize he has a son and wants revenge.

That's just great ! - And I could shave 2 words off by taking "Twenty years" - then It's down to 36. And I agree - some things just can't be boiled down when the ingredient is complex has many…
on Two farmers in Iceland are framed by the Sheriff and sent to Denmark to slave in chains for the rest of their life. The younger one returns after 20 years to realize he has a son and wants revenge.

He was sent for prison for life - no one ever came back from the "slave yard" in Copenhagen
on Two farmers in Iceland are framed by the Sheriff and sent to Denmark to slave in chains for the rest of their life. The younger one returns after 20 years to realize he has a son and wants revenge.

The crime was stealing fish hooks and fishing string (which was enough) His motivation is revenge and getting his farm back - but returning he's evidently gone mad..... so he try's to get the facts right for his son.
on Two farmers in Iceland are framed by the Sheriff and sent to Denmark to slave in chains for the rest of their life. The younger one returns after 20 years to realize he has a son and wants revenge.

The bulk of the story is the suffering and surviving of the main character and then the embarrassment and the conviction of the accuser doing wrong but thinking of doing right. It is also about his girlfriend getting accused by…

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