holbrook99

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9 loglines
16 reviews

‘The only straight player on an all-gay football team is engaged to the daughter of a disapproving, homophobic dinosaur. With his team aiming for the final, he struggles for his father-in-law’s blessing, who just so happens to be the league’s top referee’

March 23, 2015
The only straight player on an otherwise all-gay football team is engaged to the daughter of a homophobic dinosaur, who just so happens to be the league’s top referee.

March 18, 2015
Faced with the prospect of being forced into early retirement, a tough female detective agrees to one last big case. Her commitment to the force is questioned when she starts to fall in love with her mark.

November 6, 2013
Faced with the prospect of being forced into early retirement, a tough female detective agrees to an undercover operation: To infiltrate the life of a respected London gangster. The case hits a snag when she falls in love with her mark.

January 21, 2013
Peter has an over active imagination and takes it upon himself to seek out and banish the beasts that he hears his mother describe, only to discover that in fact they are not beasts at all.

August 8, 2012
Gale and his family have had to flee their previous life to start again in New Mexico. Gale’s troubled son Tommy steals from a local drug baron and when Gale’s family are tormented and threatened, Gale erupts into action, and protecting his family is something he is VERY good at.

August 8, 2012
“A withdrawn, abused and bullied teenager, does well to keep his various and at times genius talents well hidden from his tormentors. A chance meeting with a drifter however, changes everything.”

May 31, 2012
Egotistical 90’s band manager Steve Gold attempts to reform the modestly successfull boyband Xcite.

May 30, 2012
A drug addict and a businessman come together through their joint love of music, and become increasingly dependant on each other.

May 28, 2012

on A drug addict and a businessman come together through their joint love of music, and become increasingly dependant on each other.

Not been here for a while but here is the updated logline: A business man and a drug addict form a close bond after a chance meeting, and a mutual love for music. When their usual mundane lives begin to…
on Peter has an over active imagination and takes it upon himself to seek out and banish the beasts that he hears his mother describe, only to discover that in fact they are not beasts at all.

He is a child. It's about a child learning about being two-faced...So when he hears his mother 'describing' her friends, he takes her descriptions quite literally, so he see's these people as various monsters, and decides to go on a…
on Gale and his family have had to flee their previous life to start again in New Mexico. Gale’s troubled son Tommy steals from a local drug baron and when Gale’s family are tormented and threatened, Gale erupts into action, and protecting his family is something he is VERY good at.

Reading this back, it really is far too long... "Gale moves his family to the isolated town of El Roto, New Mexico and is forced into action when the local psychopath begins to terrorise and torment his family."
on An Australian researcher, transforms her life, after meeting a Scottish SAS captain in London and making a commitment to meet him again in five years time, when he retires.

^^Ignore that, don't know what happened there....but something like this might work better... An Australian researcher transforms her (Mundane?) life after meeting a Scottish SAS captain in London, and making a commitment to meet him again in five years time,…
on An Australian researcher, transforms her life, after meeting a Scottish SAS captain in London and making a commitment to meet him again in five years time, when he retires.

An Australian researcher transforms her life after meeting a Scottish SAS captain in London, and making a commitment to meet him again in five years time, when he retires.
on An Australian researcher, transforms her life, after meeting a Scottish SAS captain in London and making a commitment to meet him again in five years time, when he retires.

This is a good logline, and one that doesn't need too much work. I would be interested in a little more detail in regards to WHY she needs to transform her life in the first place. What issues did she…
on “A withdrawn, abused and bullied teenager, does well to keep his various and at times genius talents well hidden from his tormentors. A chance meeting with a drifter however, changes everything.”

OR... "Benson, An abused teenager, has the unique abilty of controlling animals. A chance meeting with a drifter takes him on an adventure with the only friend he has ever known. When his tormentors kill the drifter, Benson inflicts the…
on “A withdrawn, abused and bullied teenager, does well to keep his various and at times genius talents well hidden from his tormentors. A chance meeting with a drifter however, changes everything.”

Ok, how aboutthis? When a withdrawn, bullied and abused teenager, with an abilty to communicate with animals meets an odd drifter, he begins to use his abilities in ways he never imagined, ultimately leading to the punishment of his tormentors.
on A drug addict and a businessman come together through their joint love of music, and become increasingly dependant on each other.

How about... "When two people from very different walks of life are brought together through a chance meeting and a mutual love for music, they begin to rely on each other more and more as their usual mediocre lives begin…
on Egotistical 90’s band manager Steve Gold attempts to reform the modestly successfull boyband Xcite.

It's probably relevant to mention that this is a 6 part comedy-drama that has already been completed. Steve's obsatcles are a lack of respect from everybody he comes into contact with as well as a blatant lack of any real…