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The resourceful best friend and panicked boyfriend of a young girl in suburbia struggle to overcome a shady drug dealer, and the cops, in order to defeat the satanic forces possessing her.
I like that. Thanks!
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The resourceful best friend and panicked boyfriend of a young girl in suburbia struggle to overcome a shady drug dealer, and the cops, in order to defeat the satanic forces possessing her.
Ok. I see two options: 1) It's a crime story and the twist is that it's not a drug overdose, it's out right demon possession, as you say. 2) It's horror/occult. What's at stake is her soul. The main character's…
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The resourceful best friend and panicked boyfriend of a young girl in suburbia struggle to overcome a shady drug dealer, and the cops, in order to defeat the satanic forces possessing her.
Thank you, Richie. That is a very helpful reworking. Just one question. You phrase it as "a determined drug dealer." This is a plot point I had not considered. Were you thinking that he's determined to not be incriminated? Or…
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I sent out a pitch to two seperate production companies. Both passed on it. I need help writing one that will work.
Thanks Presario. Here's how I'm going to critique this... I'm going to copy out (below) the elements of your query letter that I think belong in a query letter. Then, I'm going to add my suggestions for improvement. If there's…
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The resourceful best friend and panicked boyfriend of a young girl in suburbia struggle to overcome a shady drug dealer, and the cops, in order to defeat the satanic forces possessing her.
Main character is the best friend. He's the hero. He calls the shots.
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The resourceful best friend and panicked boyfriend of a young girl in suburbia struggle to overcome a shady drug dealer, and the cops, in order to defeat the satanic forces possessing her.
The cop is an obstacle because she's being pursued by him, having mowed down a pedestrian while driving possessed. The guys know that if she goes to jail there may be no hope of freeing her from the demon. The…
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I sent out a pitch to two seperate production companies. Both passed on it. I need help writing one that will work.
If you're willing to share your query letter with me I'd be happy to provide feedback. Let me know and I'll tell you where to send it.
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To overthrow the manipulative authorities of year 2086, a man genetically designed to teach the values of the regime decides to fight his mental programming, team up with outlaws and free a people brainwashed by a corrupt government
Ah, then here's a question: What causes him to decide to fight his mental programming? Knowing that this is a series, the answer to that could become part of the backstory, or you could handle it in a 2-part series…
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When a highly-successful psychologist saves a man on the street from suicide, she decides she isn’t helping enough people who really need it, and starts a “mobile therapist” ride company, counseling strangers from pick-up to destination; until one-day she accepts a fare across country from a man with real demons to confront.
Thanks Camilla. I agree. That was actually the part that confused people I read it to. What off time?, and why would she choose to spend it like that? - was the reaction.
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When a highly-successful psychologist saves a man on the street from suicide, she decides she isn’t helping enough people who really need it, and starts a “mobile therapist” ride company, counseling strangers from pick-up to destination; until one-day she accepts a fare across country from a man with real demons to confront.
Figuratively. It's a more conventional psychodrama. What I was attempting to do was draw a contrast between her everyday clients and this man who has serious issues to work through. I imagine it's part road movie, in that she must…
