Gemini Silver

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When a controversial podcast host believes an invasion is coming on Halloween, his friends bring him to a party to get his mind off of the ridiculous theories; but when one of the host’s friends reads a spell from an ancient book that unleashes several deities, the host and his friends must survive the night to break the spell.

June 15, 2019
When a colossal monster attacks New York City, a partygoer and his friends must rescue his girlfriend in the middle of the chaos while documenting the events. — Cloverfield (2008)

June 10, 2019
A closeted, sultry actress and a depressed, overachieving high school senior begrudgingly form a bond to overthrow a crazed anarchist bent on strengthening the divide between their two different lifestyles.

May 29, 2019
A group of subjects in a sleep experiment are stalked by multidimensional entities awakened to rip their spirits apart.

May 29, 2019

on After years of watching from the wings, a determined young artist sets out to make her place on the world’s stage..

Have a strong inciting incident with some stakes, but don't drop the "wallflower" trait. How does our protagonist make the world her stage? Does she meet anybody of significance that helps her along the journey? What are her views on…
on On the eve of her final night at an urgent care center, an opiate-dependent nurse practitioner must overcome her addiction to fight off a gang of violent teen junkies, fiending for the stash of narcotics.

I agree with dpg that the story has promise, but I think it would be better for the protagonist about to work her shift to create a stronger conflict. FWIW
on A lyncanthropic warrior reluctantly teams with a human princess after a mysterious knight, who slaughtered the warrior’s village years ago, returns and begins attacking humans.

This sounds like a good idea that can be put on the screen. The idea of having a lyncanthropic warrior teaming up with a human princess is interesting, but does the former have a past with the latter or…
on An Intelligent student on the verge of expulsion uses embarrassing secrets he uncovered to prove his innocence when he is blamed for a missing classmate.

The idea sounds interesting and would be something I'd want to see on screen! But, what type of embarrassing secrets does he have in terms of how your story would progress? Secrets against the missing classmate or the people who…
on 30 years an only child, ?a man is forced to deal with having two brothers and a family past he has never known.

The idea sounds interesting, but there should be some compelling objective. Why must he deal with two brothers? What family past was the protagonist not aware of? How does our protagonist and supporting characters grow throughout the story? What's at…
on A closeted, sultry actress and a depressed, overachieving high school senior begrudgingly form a bond to overthrow a crazed anarchist bent on strengthening the divide between their two different lifestyles.

NOTE: I intended for this idea to be a mix of comedy, action, and drama with character-driven elements.
on A true story, a man jailed twenty-six years for a crime his twin committed fights a choice: exact sweet revenge on his brother or forgive him to be fully and finally free.

Great idea for a compelling story with what can be an interesting journey for the main character, but... A story like this should be a biography, but it is passable as drama. What could you do to make the…
on A quirky, slightly neurotic writer must overcome years of social anxiety and isolation in order to win the heart of the man she loves.

"quirky, slightly neurotic writer" ---> Why not put quirky, neurotic writer instead? "Must overcome years of social anxiety and isolation" ---> You should be a little more specific with how the character goes on about achieving the goal, maybe add…

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