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A hot- tempered uncle accidentally slaps a nagging woman over an ownership of a compound wall, issue soon spirals into a building-wide sensationalised political circus of gossip, mockery, legalities, and indifference.
I think you get across the feeling of chaos and the anticipation of a company wide meltdown. But for the logline, I think you can improve it by getting a bit more specific. 'Issue soon spirals', feels a tad ambiguous,…
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On a farm in the Portuguese countryside, two Indostanic immigrants with a forbidden attraction become the suspects after the mysterious death of their overbearing female boss. Without papers and pursued by the locals, they take refuge in the container where they live.
I think this is a really effective set up of the characters and the world! All the little details really encourage my curiosity and I am hooked! My only real critique is the last sentence, I believe that it can…
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When he is sent to investigate a billionaire with a deadly artifact, in in a world where the line between natural and supernatural is growing thin, a preteen magical spy must return the artifact in return for medicine for his dying sister; but when his cover blown, it must learn to work with his arrogant rival in order to fight his way to the mission’s end before the artifact destroys the city.
An intriguing concept! As for the Logline itself, I do think that some of the information should be condensed and perhaps rearranged. For example, start with the main character and then establish the event which leads to his preceding action.…
