jumeriot

Penpusher · 215 points

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7 loglines
15 reviews

Novel: A french teenager runs away to fulfill his dream of becoming an actor in L.A.

October 24, 2017
Novel: In a supernatural world where superpowers are common, a likeable teenager discovers he possesses a power known to be cursed. Cast out by society, he will go on a journey to learn the origin of his power and prove to himself and the society he can be better than the curse.

October 24, 2017
Novel: When his critically ill mother tells him to stop drifting through life, a penpusher leaves his entire life behind to go on an adventure and pursue his dream of finding a legendary animal in the heart of south america.

October 24, 2017
When he arrives for a year in america, a reserved french student must learn to adapt to make the most out of the experience.

October 23, 2017
Reword #2: When she is abducted by her estranged father so she can be spared, a stubborn humanitarian must find a way to prevent him from killing most of humanity.

June 3, 2017
Reword: Imprisoned in an apartment with a complete stranger, a humanitarian twenty-something has to a find a way to save the world and its population before her abductors’ plan unfolds.

June 2, 2017
Imprisoned in an apartment with a complete stranger, an idealist twenty-something has to find a way to save herself and the world population from the secret organization holding her captive.

May 30, 2017

on Novel: In a supernatural world where superpowers are common, a likeable teenager discovers he possesses a power known to be cursed. Cast out by society, he will go on a journey to learn the origin of his power and prove to himself and the society he can be better than the curse.

In a supernatural world where superpowers are common, a?teenage boy?goes on a journey to fight the curse associated with the power he possesses. Should I add more stakes like how he will be cast out or imprisoned or executed?
on Novel: When his critically ill mother tells him to stop drifting through life, a penpusher leaves his entire life behind to go on an adventure and pursue his dream of finding a legendary animal in the heart of south america.

So how could I make this work? By changing the reason he wants to go on the adventure and forget about the mother?
on Novel: In a supernatural world where superpowers are common, a likeable teenager discovers he possesses a power known to be cursed. Cast out by society, he will go on a journey to learn the origin of his power and prove to himself and the society he can be better than the curse.

The cursed power is actually only cursed because of the previous users and how the society handled them. It is cursed only by conditioning but the protagonist is actually not cursed at all, he's a nice guy who didn't ask…
on Novel: When his critically ill mother tells him to stop drifting through life, a penpusher leaves his entire life behind to go on an adventure and pursue his dream of finding a legendary animal in the heart of south america.

Foxtrot25, I had in mind the fact that he and his mother used to study stories about this legendary animal and they used to go on adventures together. But then life got in the way and he followed the beaten…
on When he arrives for a year in america, a reserved french student must learn to adapt to make the most out of the experience.

Thank you Moviefreak81. Would using "to open up" instead of "to adapt" be better? I thought of it all about a novel telling the story of a french boy spending a year abroad in the U.S. in a host family…
on When he arrives for a year in america, a reserved french student must learn to adapt to make the most out of the experience.

It's actually a logline for a novel. The guy is reserved because he can't speak very well yet and he's just a silent type of guy. He's being pushed into a new culture, new country, and a new high school…
on After a decade of hunting terrorists. Liam’s new icy adventure to restore an abandoned ski lodge ends up with his former Special forces team having to adapt to being the hunted when they cross paths with a legendary creature known for its winter scream.

Just out of retirement, a team of special forces awakens a legendary creature as they attempt to restore an abandonned ski lodge. They will have to get back into their old habits as they are hunted one by one. This…
on Reword: Imprisoned in an apartment with a complete stranger, a humanitarian twenty-something has to a find a way to save the world and its population before her abductors’ plan unfolds.

I made a new logline for it: https://loglines.org/logline/reword-2-when-she-is-abducted-by-her-estranged-father-so-she-can-be-spared-a-stubborn-humanitarian-must-find-a-way-to-prevent-him-from-killing-most-of-humanity/
on Reword: Imprisoned in an apartment with a complete stranger, a humanitarian twenty-something has to a find a way to save the world and its population before her abductors’ plan unfolds.

I made a new logline for it: https://loglineit.com/logline/reword-2-when-she-is-abducted-by-her-estranged-father-so-she-can-be-spared-a-stubborn-humanitarian-must-find-a-way-to-prevent-him-from-killing-most-of-humanity/
on Reword: Imprisoned in an apartment with a complete stranger, a humanitarian twenty-something has to a find a way to save the world and its population before her abductors’ plan unfolds.

Thank you for the advice, these are some ideas, maybe you can help me figure out what would work best: - Too demanding of herself (is there an adjective for that? Such as self-judgmental) - Fixated - idealist - self-judgmental