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“A solitary chinese student gets lost one night during the end-of-year trip in Venice, encountering all kinds of nocturnal characters in a decadent suburb as he tries to find himself and his future.”
You have described a character and a series of events but there are no dramatic developments and so you don't actually have a story.
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When a giant great white shark terrorizes a New England beach town, a local sheriff must team up with a marine biologist and a grizzled fisherman to hunt down and destroy the beast before it can claim any more lives.
I suppose, in simple terms, the aim of a logline is to summarise a compelling and developing conflict, it's genre and key characters.
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When a giant great white shark terrorizes a New England beach town, a local sheriff must team up with a marine biologist and a grizzled fisherman to hunt down and destroy the beast before it can claim any more lives.
Loglines for action-adventure stories usually feature an active protagonist, but when it comes to thrillers the hero often starts out as a victim or in the case of neo-noir as an antihero. In both cases these characters are reacting to…
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A woman seeks vengeance against two men who made her life a living hell, her husband and a corrupt lawyer, but after she sets them up to kill on another, she struggles to prove her innocence when the police discover she had reason to kill them.
A pair of corrupt cops are determined to stop a battered wife from evading justice after she commits the perfect crime: she orchestrates her husband and a corrupt lawyer to kill one another.
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A teenage girl discovers a talking cat only to find out she must return him to his owners in 1970s Stockholm.
To give your story dramatic stakes there has to be a pressing reason why she needs the cat.
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During the festive week of Christmas, a lonely student, recovering from a break up, is tormented by an unknown entity in red when he writes a spiteful letter to Santa.
A Xmas comedy horror story. Original. Excellent. Lonely and heartbroken during Xmas, a student writes a spiteful letter to Santa and ends up tormented by a red devil.
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A teenage girl discovers a talking cat only to find out she must return him to his owners in 1970s Stockholm.
Is this a time travel movie? Also, please say why she needs to return the cat?
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The mob’s top enforcer does not experience fear or pain, he is selfless, loyal and incredibly focused but his life is on the line and he is running out of time because the headstrong and impulsive youth who steals £17m from the mob is always just one step ahead.
Interesting comments.
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A retired cavalry soldier is forced to partner with a Cheyenne Indian to track down a serial killer who has kidnaped his daughter.
How about a retired cavalry soldier whose wife/brother/family/sister was killed by an Indian war party?....
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The ambition of a young woman to be wealthy and own a portfolio of properties is stymied by the sudden death of her husband. But she continues to prioritise her need for success and wealth over the welfare of her teenage stepson. Feeling unloved he contemplates suicide. She is failing to reach her goal. From the tangles, bonds and mixed loyalties they find that success is a shared journey.
Great. I give you my time for free and you thank me by calling my comments 'vacuous'. Keep up this attitude and you will be a great success.
