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After a raid by a corrupt government leaves his partner dead, a desperate man uses gang controlled technology to escape his dystopian world to an alternate reality in a bid to replace a version of himself living an idealistic life.
Hmm, original I had something about losing his family in a raid, but was worried was over doing it. I also didn’t want this other version to be horrible. As I want this to be difficult, it’s either swap or…
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After being transplanted with the arm of a recently executed bandit, a shy and coward farmer must learn how to control his new body part and overcome his cowardice when a violent gang led by the bandit’s vicious brother threaten the town and the woman he loves.
Is the body part controlling him? Otherwise isn’t he just going through rehab? So how does him having the arm make him the person to need to stop the gang
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In the depths of the depression, a small time con artist teams up with a seasoned pro to con $500,000 from a ruthless mobster to avenge the mobster’s murder of his mentor.
Only thing I am not sure of is what is the inciting incident is (Death of partner, offer to rob) Like Karel mentioned, I think putting the death up top provides motivation Also why does the pro want in? If…
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A struggling CIA consultant fights for survival after a secretive and morally corrupt government agency forces him to kill his team by overwriting his consciousness with that of an assassin’s.
Great tip. I will look to rewrite to show how to illustrate that there is a temporary aspect. Yep, getting a few key memories to really give the antagonist the opportunity to know exactly where to strike the protagonist, what…
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A struggling CIA consultant fights for survival after a secretive and morally corrupt government agency forces him to kill his team by overwriting his consciousness with that of an assassin’s.
The way I saw the process working is the victim's mind is downloaded into a virtual waiting room, while the Assassinis uploaded. The once the mission is complete the process is reversed. In this story there is a problem, meaning…
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A loving family man must go on the run after a powerful government program uses him as a proxy to commit murder. Now, in order to expose the truth, he’ll have to reveal his own dark and secretive past.
That's great a really like this version.
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A wannabe weatherman gets an internship at a small t.v. station in suburban Ohio, but must fight his own tendencies of stability against the abnormal weather patterns that fame the state.
It might sound odd, but I would have his instability tied to the weather somehow, so in a strange way he is reporting on his on well being without knowing it.
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A loving family man must go on the run after a powerful government program uses him as a proxy to commit murder. Now, in order to expose the truth, he’ll have to reveal his own dark and secretive past.
Thanks for your help, I will look to rework it. I guess I want to get across in my logline that he is framed as when he committed the murder he wasn't in control of his body at the time.…
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When an assassin, who can control the actions of others, discovers his recent missions were actually un-sanctioned hits, he must now hunt down his mysterious employers who have now made him their top target.
I've tossed up between the two, terms of time frame. The technology required seems to lean more towards something set in the future, but when I make notes, I tend to lean more towards a hidden technology in today's world,…
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When an assassin, who can control the actions of others, discovers his recent missions were actually un-sanctioned hits, he must now hunt down his mysterious employers who have now made him their top target.
Thanks for the info, it defo seems to share a lot of the same concepts. I would, hopefully, want to use some modern day themes of mass survalliance and living in a world where even the person themselves can be…
