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Samurai · 530 points

1,970 points to Mentor

10 loglines
28 reviews

When a desperate fugitive randomly chooses the house of a reclusive lock-in to hide out in, he must pander to her love-starved attention or risk being discovered by the police. – A dark romantic comedy.

August 20, 2018
When a broke musician is accidentally locked in a wine cellar with a rich beautiful socialite, he desperately attempts to woo her (and her wealth) before somebody comes to their rescue.

March 27, 2018
A career-focused artist demands a ‘share no details’ rule with her one-night-stand, but becomes tempted to break her own rule when they start to bond during the disastrous night.

November 24, 2017
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When a bitter war-veteran befriends a rough sixteen-year-old girl they discover a common sense of hopelessness, however, when she becomes indebted to a sleazy drug dealer, he must rediscover the war-hero within to save her.

October 17, 2017
When an anxious recluse agrees to take his cancer-fighting friend on one last adventure, he doesn’t bank on having his beliefs, loyalties and survival skills challenged when she falls fatally ill.

July 13, 2017
Helped by her friends, a shy teenager finds success in an underground art world, but is left struggling when treatment for her mental illness strips her of both her best friend and her creativity.

May 22, 2017
A reworking of a previous attempt: A shy teenager makes a breakthrough into an underground art scene, but struggles to maintain her creativity after being treated for her mental illness.

May 1, 2017
When two wholesome brothers inherit a strip club they must not only overcome their own prejudices to see it succeed, but also defend it when the upright community decides to drive it out of business

May 1, 2017
When a shy teenager finds herself torn between her life-long best friend and a potential new love, she discovers one of them is a projection of her mental illness.

April 28, 2017
When his vibrant friend turns seriously ill during a road trip, and anxious recluse must get her home through a strange and threatening world.

March 13, 2017

on After a group of homeless friends moves into a train station to escape a shelter bully, its leader takes a stand to protect them and give them the best New Year.

I like the first part, "After a group of homeless friends... escape a shelter bully". It's enticing. But after that, the second part seems unclear. What do they now need protecting from? What has the New Year got to do…
on When a son is chosen to take over his father’s billion dollar company, he must adjust to the world of business and his newfound power.

My first reaction to this logline is: So what? I don't mean that in a rude way, but there is nothing there to interest me. I don't care about big business growth and I would say very few movie-goers would…
on When a dangerous CME is earthbound, and a satellite reflector won’t work, NASA, learning they have four days till impact, release a female hacker from prison, to find the problem and save the planet.

I really like this! My one gripe would be that I feel the female hacker should be more notorious or something, otherwise, I just don't buy that NASA would turn to her. She'd really must have a greater background to…
on After giving nourishment and shelter to a wounded, fugitive vampire, a love-struck yet timid teen joins her quest: to assassinate her Sire before he starts a vampiric civil war.

My first impression is simply we don't know enough about the lead. Who is he? What are his weaknesses? Why is this going to be difficult for him to overcome? I wouldn't bother saying 'bright future' unless this is relevant…
on When a vindictive cyber terrorist is fatally wounded, an arrogant gamer must complete a video game built using the suspect’s mind to retrieve stolen nuclear codes before they die.

Yes, this reads a little clunky. But I find the idea of a video game built out of somebody's mind in order to penetrate it to find a secret really fascinating. Good luck with this story.
on In order to acquire funding for their passion project, a group of pretentious film students must survive the night in a haunted house.

I don't think the threat is real enough. At this stage, the students could spend the night in the haunted house, sleep soundly, get up, and have jam and toast for breakfast.? Who is the antagonist, and why should we…
on A former lone wolf blackwater operative is forced back with his team to stop a terrorist organization from getting a mythological artifact that could destroyed the planet.

It took me a few seconds to grasp this logline with the phrase 'forced back'. I read as meaning 'forced to back away from'. As in 'they were forced back from the exploding car".? Also, if they are 'forced back'…
on After recruitment, a DSA agent takes on the toughest cases that are thrown at her, while trying to maintain a relationship with her handsome, yet computer-nerd boyfriend.

I think this logline lacks details. It would be more powerful if we knew exactly what kind of tough case she is dealing with, and what specifically is causing the strain on her relationship.? Ideally, it would be great if…
on After losing her partner in dance competition and being stuck in physical therapy for her injuries, the girl must find another partner to win the upcoming competition in which her coach suggested a perfectly skilled street fighter with no dance experience.

Okay, so there a few things odd here. The first sentence confused me. What do you mean 'lost'? Did he die? Did he go out for a smoke and couldn't find the door back in? Also, what on earth happened…
on When Jen’s niece accidentally sends them back to 1988 the one person who can help them is she man she swore never to see again. Her ex-husband

This sound like a fun story. Although for a romance logline, I feel it lacks relationship tension. I feel I need to know something move about Jen. What's her flaw? What's she got against her ex? What do they need…

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